[Issues found by Astator] Payle Hazrad

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Payle Hazrad

Postby Payle Hazrad on May 7th, 2016, 6:14 pm

Payle Hazrad


Race: Human.
Gender: Male.
Age: 22yo.
Birthday: 45th of Winter, 493 AV
Birthplace: Zeltiva

Appearance: 170cm height, 65 kg weight. He keep his sand colored hair with leather straps or let them fall into his shoulder. His eye is blue but darker and often mistaken as black. Olive colored skin with little to no freckles painted his whole body. He is not muscular while definitely not considered slim. Lean perhaps is the most accurate way to describe him. His voice fall into bariton group even though he want it to be more deeper.

Character Concept

Raised as a younger brother of the twoborn of Hazrad family, Payle was the polar opposite of his older brother Baradd. Payle was the cheerful kid who would do anything to attract attention of people around him. Spoiled as a kid he sometimes brought those attitude as adult. This attitude was changed however, when he started his teenager phase. The constant sneer from his father eroded joy and cheer from his expression day by day. Yet he kept smiling for her mother and brother. He held grudge for his father that getting worse after he found the arcane power that laid dormant within his body. His father detested him. He was long after a chance to ran away from his father. Now that he was free, he treasure it as the most precious of grace.

Character History

Payle Hazrad, son of Baldr Hazrad and Larema Hazrad, brother to Baradd born in Zeltiva. Baldr like many Zeltivan was a genuine shipwright. He didn't do much but it was enough for the family to survive. Therefore, he held high hope both both of his son, Baradd and Payle. He dreamed that one day his sons would rule Zeltivan marine trade, or at least setting up business around marine trading.

Baradd, the oldest son was tall and strong. He didn't say much, but he also blessed with intelligence. On the other hand, Payle was a sickly little kid who demand more attention. Payle was inferior to Baradd in term of academic and Baldr noticed. Baldr then slowly more inclined towards his eldest son rather than dividing his love fairly betwedn the two. As years went on, Baldr couldn't see anything in Payle but flaw and failure. On the other hand, Payle became very close to her mother. Lamera knew the darkness that cloud their family but couldn't do much about it herself. She also knew that Payle's suffering and stay close to both of her child.

Around 18yo, Payle discovered something strange when he was looking into his reflection in the mirror. He discovered that if he concentrated long enough, he could change the color of his hair, even his eye and skin. Their little family was terribly shocked by this fact. After consulting to many people, a wizard pointed to the that it was an arcane power called "Morphing". A power to change someone's body into something else. The wizard noted that it wasn't uncommon for someone to discover this type of arcane.

That was the biggest tide that swept the Hazrad family. Baldr said it was a curse from God and threw his disappointment toward his secondborn. Lamera, angered by hid husband statement also threw out her disappointment towards him. Baradd was shocked, so much that he couldn't even say a word. Yet the one who was most broken was Payle.

The day after, Lamera left the house with Payle. He couldn't left Baradf behind but the firstborn insisted that someone must took the responsibility to be in Baldr's side. Baradd was 20yo that year and said he was old enough to do it. Lamera understood, as she hugged her eldest son, both of them cried. The Baradd looked to Payle and hugged his younger brother. He whispered to Payle. "It isn't your fault, it is noone's fault. If you need me, you know you'll find me in the university."

Payle couldn't say a word that day. Payle went on and stayed with family of his mother side. They were more open with magician being born in the family and didn't blame him for the things that had been done. But deep down in his heart, Payle still blame himself as the doom that broke the Hazrad family. Two years passed when he stayed there, and he never use his power even for once. He helped as shopkeeper while his aunts and his mother ran a family shop.

When he was 21yo, he bumped into his brother coincidentally at the university library. The two brothers reunited for a while. Baradd has changed a bit, he was older and kept his hair short. Something he hated when they was younger. He becoming a merchant like his father wished to. A taste of bitterness choked Payle as the painful memories were coming back. He absently apologies to Baradd, an action that replied with a slap on his left cheek. It was not hard, more like a slap to wake somebody up. Baradd smiled, he repeated the words from two years ago, stated that he did not blame him. And technically noone to be blame. He asked what did he do with his power. Payle shrugged the answer. Baradd then adviced to do something with the arcane. "Magics are rare. You couldn't throw it away... make use of it."

"I can't." Payle replied.

"Why can't?"

Baradd knew the answer was even if his brother did not say it directly. It was difficult at first but Baradd and Lamera managed to made Payle embraced the arcane. With the support of Baradd and Lamera, he spent his next two years trying to figure out what did his arcane power do. The library of Zeltiva has plethora of books, many of which mentioned magic. But there was no book that taught him Morphing. In fact there are no magic books there, what was available is academic study books regarding the subject: Magic. He spent entire years reading anything related to morphing, and the basic of magic. In his freetime he often practiced with simple morph.

At the end of spring 515, he could morph quite well. It was not amazing, but good. He ended up into conclusion that he need to master the art, something that his mother and brother did not disagree with. To be able to did that, he knew he must go beyond Zeltiva. His journey started that day. To seek mastery of a gift that tore his family apart.


Fluent Language: Common Tounge.
Basic Language: Fratava.
Poor Language: Kontinese.


Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Morphing 11 SP, 15 RB 26 Competent
Acrobatics 9 SP 9 Novice
Persuasion 15 SP 15 Novice
Negotiation 5 SP 5 Novice
Rhetoric 5 SP 5 Novice
Weapon: Dagger 5 SP 5 Novice


Morphing : The Basics of Morphing
Shopkeeping : Persuasive Approach


1 Set of Clothing
-Colorless Shirt
-Black Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Long Cloak
-Simple Leather Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Bone)
-Brush (Bone)
-Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: Baradd gave him a cold iron dagger, only sharp on one edge. Quite long and broad for a dagger.


Location: Riverfall

House: 400 squarefeet apartment at Windswept Condo

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM

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Payle Hazrad

Postby Astator on May 21st, 2016, 8:52 pm


Welcome to Mizahar! A few issues have arisen during the reviewing of your character sheet that must be addressed. As this is an intervention you must cease all In Character posting until the intervention has been lifted. So let’s get started!

  • Morphing is NOT one of the magics one can learn via self-discovery, meaning you must learn it through users or books. This means that your history must state as such and remember learning something like Morphing is super dangerous.
  • Magicians being born into a family is scary idea. They ultimately become unpredictable, dangerous, and at the best of times crazy. Let me point you to the Wizard’s Psychology
  • The library of Zeltiva has plethora of books, many of which mentioned magic. But there was no book that taught him Morphing. In fact there are no magic books there, what was available is academic study books regarding the subject: Magic. He spent entire years reading anything related to morphing, and the basic of magic. In his freetime he often practiced with simple morph.
    I am just going to STOP you right there right now. No. All books on magic found in the Zeltivan University are not open to peple. In fact, any ‘academic books’ found on the subject of magic would’ve been burned when the Djed College in Zeltiva was blown up. Please fix this grevious error.
  • How did you come back learning Fratava and Kontonese?
  • Your lores are far too broad for use. What about the Basics in Morphing does your character know? Same goes with the Shop keeping lore. What about said approach does your character know?
  • Please list all the belongings found in your apartment.
  • You must attach your Character Sheet to your Profile. If you need help please let me know. What you will need to do:
    - Copy your character sheet’s URL
    - Go to the User Control Panel found at the top left below the menu bar.
    - Select Profile and locate the box that says Character Sheet. Paste in the URL and hit submit.
Once you have completed what I have asked, please private message me via the little envelope to the left underneath my name and letting me know.

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