(Flasback) Our First Adventure (Leon Wolfbane)

[Gaius Snowsong]

"Thanks but you keep the half of it. I don't need it all." Gaius said as he gave him 150 GM."So in a couple of days I am going to wind reach. Would you like to go?"Gaius said as he bought himself an cold ale. "I like to have company when I travel.

[Leon Wolfbane]

" Leon felt a surge of excitement, "I would be happy to help you on your adventure!" Leon grabbed his pack and helped Gaius pack his things and they got ready for their journey. Leon thought about them going on foot but he decided to use the money Gaius gave him to buy 2 horses. Leon went to the blacksmith and bought Gaius a sword. Leon started to wonder and asked Gaius, " What do you need to do at Wind Reach?"

[Echelon]

Adventurer's Loot A Gift Experience is it's own reward. Gaius' Loot : Gaius Snowsong Lore: Leon Wolfbane Items or Consequences: -1 gold for two nights in inn. Notes: I'll give you the two nights in the inn. All other purchases, profits, lores, and skills are void, for lack of description, however. And, to acquire a last name that fits with the lore check out the holds of Avanthal. Leon's Loot : Leon Wolfbane Lore: Gaius Snowsong Notes: All purchases, profits, lores, and skills are void, for lack of description. This is lacking a lot of detail, and I mean a lot. It resembles more a plotnotes page then an actual scene. To gain experience you need to slow down, take your story one scene at a time, this usually means doing five or six entire posts in one room. With several paragraphs per post. A few times you focused on how Leon felt and what he observed, focus more on this. If you don't know what to write about write about how your characters feels and why he feels that way, perhaps write abut he thinks the other person feels. Also, describe the room your character is in what your character is wearing, how they move, and what their voice sounds like as they speak. Each and every detail like this gets you closer and closer to the level of writing that Mizahar requires. It will take much longer to travel than you mapped out here. You don't have enough for carriages or horses. Neither of you know your way to Wind Reach or have the skill to go there. Money must be acquired with express mod permission, and jobs must be modded to get, even being a bard. Because of all of these logistics, as of the end of this thread you must still be in Avanthal. Don't worry it is quite nice in Avanthal, I don't think other domains are ready for you yet. And, for a final note: You can only have one character in any city at a time. - if you have ANY questions or concerns about this grading, don't hesitate to PM me.