[Issues found by Nemesis] Cadwell Lison (WIP, complete rewrite inbound)

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Cadwell Lison (WIP, complete rewrite inbound)

Postby Cadwell on November 13th, 2014, 1:32 am

Cadwell Lison


Appearance

Aliases: Carver, The Bear, Big Man
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Age:
Birthday: Day, Season, Year.
Birthplace: Sunberth
Current Location: Near Zeltiva

Appearance:

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Freakishly tall at nearly seven feet, heavily built and heavily scarred, Cadwell is the kind of person who commands attention. A receding hairline and a graying beard suggest that he's old enough to be experienced, and his scowl seems permanently set to "angry father figure." His hair is orangish-red, baked pale by a long hours spent outdoors under the sun.

Character Concept

A Sunberth boy, Cadwell and his friends traveled to Zeltiva on the idea that "that's where the rich ponces live." He and his allies have set up outside the Mirahil Pass and relieve the occasional merchant of the heavy burden of all that money, as well as anything shiny that catches their attention.

Character History

Tell me all about your past, baby.

Language

Fluent Language: Most fluent language here.
Basic Language: Fill me in, if you want.
Poor Language: Fill me in, if you want.

(HELPFUL HINT, Please Remove - Practiced Languages: Common)

Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Skill 1 # SP # Novice
Skill 2 # SP # Novice
Skill 3 # RB, # SP # Competent


(HELPFUL HINT, Please Remove - Common Skills: Trade skills related to Teaching, Magics, Shipworking, Merchants, Scribes)

Lores

Helpful Lores: (Pick 2)
Lore of Zeltiva Streetplan
Lore of Zeltivan Culture
Lore of History of Zeltiva
Lore of History of the University
Lore of Religion: Laviku

Possessions

1 Set of Clothing
-Simple Shirt
-Simple Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Simple Cloak or Coat
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Wood)
-Brush (Wood)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week's worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: Fill me in, please! (HELPFUL HINT, Please Remove - Max. 50gm worth)

Housing

Location: Where in Mizahar are you living?

House: Cottages or flats, roughly 20x20, includes a hearth, bunk, chest, chair, and table.

(HELPFUL HINT, Please Remove - IMPORTANT NOTE: PCs may not reside in Zeltiva without housing. Tents are not permitted, and PCs will not be allowed to sleep on the streets. Homelessness is not an option.

Temporary Housing for visitors is available at: World's End Grotto. University Living Quarters are free for students taking 2 or more classes.)

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM


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Last edited by Cadwell on November 14th, 2014, 7:37 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Cadwell Lison

Postby Nemesis on November 13th, 2014, 11:09 am

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Greetings! I'm Nemesis, the DS of Ravok. I've noticed a few problems with your Character Sheet that you should probably take a look at. Until these issues have been resolved, I'm afraid you cannot post IC in any of Mizahar's cities.

  • Please list your Dagger weapon as "Weapon: Dagger".
  • Please explain how your character knows Vani and Pavi (two languages that are endemic to cities that are a substantial distance away).
  • Ravok doesn't have a criminal underworld. Period. I suggest you re-read Ravokian Lore and if you are still confused, send me a PM and we will discuss it. But I cannot help you until you make an effort to learn about the city.

Once you have fixed what I have asked you to, send me a PM and I will remove this Intervention.

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Cadwell Lison

Postby Cadwell on November 13th, 2014, 6:15 pm

PM sent, along with question.
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