Viridiana

[Viridiana]

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[frame=#400040][center][size=150]Character's Name[/size]
Viridiana[/center]

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[u]Basic Information[/u]

[color=#800040]Race: Vanthal
Birthday & Age : 496 AV (16 years)
Gender: Female
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[u]Physical Description[/u]
[color=#800040]•   Viridiana is exactly 5’0 and weighs 110lbs. She has elbow length wavy, black hair with purple highlights and almond shaped spilt-colored eyes. Left/Right Eyes: Red on side and Blue on the other. While her face has her ancestors common rounded features they are far from delicate more angular and sharp (due do this people often mistake her for older than she is), almost leaving her with a perpetual mischievous expression (which suits her just fine). Her skin is light olive and bruises easily.[/color]

[u]Character Concept[/u]
[color=#800040]Viridiana has exuberant personality. Commonly known for being full of laughter and mischief. She weighs every word and action heavily for she believes that there should never be a regret in life and one should always know the consequences of an action before doing or saying anything (this often results in her not being able to say exactly what she thinks or blatantly changing the subject, though her eyes often give her away), people often mistake her for being shifty or up to something…though they aren’t always wrong about that; she believes there is no right or wrong only what is met with peace in your own heart and mind. She tends to come across as a little too hyper and babble about nonsense when bored or nervous. She cries, screams, laughs and yells freely as she believes one should never hold these things in but she knows there is a time and place for everything. She enjoys making up intricate tales but her passion is dancing, she could never live without sweets and tends to overindulge and frequently becomes sick as a result. Viridiana’s dislikes change frequently as her moods, one day she may greatly dislike Myrian for (what she feels) is their disregard of life, while the next day she would try to make friends with one. Though one thing that never changes is her passionate dislike of anything sour and the word no.[/color]

[u]Character History[/u]
[color=#800040]o   Viridiana was born in the Snowsong hold in the Season of Summer, Day 4 in the Year of 495 AV. Most of her childhood was spent outdoors caring in the ice and rolling the snow with her parents Kelvic Polar Bear. Hating being kept indoors she frequented colds and visits to the Whitevine for mild frostbite. She grew friendly and with an open mind, but often grew bored when cooped up inside leading to many mysterious pranks gone wrong. Growing up around music she found a great passion in ballads but found her voice was far from musical and began to try to find other ways to tell her stories and turned to dance. Even from a young age she found it came to her with ease as she grew older her love for it only developed as did her need to travel. With every story and visitor that came to Avanthal she felt the urge to explore to see the places they spoke of, to meet the people she had only seen in glimpses as they stayed. She wishes to know everything to create the greatest dance and story ever made. Something that will carve her name in history. And until she turned 15 she had never told her parents of this desire she only honed her skill in hunting and often traveled farther away from her hold than necessary in preparation for her departure. Now at 16 years old Viridiana does not wish to marry, she wishes for permission to explore, for she would rather become an Icemaiden than never see the world. Her parents take this news badly, for she is their only child but they can’t deny her for this very same reason and solemnly they allow her to pack her bags in hopes she will come home just as swiftly as she leaves.[/color]
[u]Training (Skills, Arcana, Gnosis, Lore)[/u]

[u]Equipment and Possessions[/u]

[u]Ledger[/u]

[u]Thread List[/u][/frame]

[Viridiana]

Character Name Viridiana Basic Information: Race: Vanthal Birthday & Age : 496 AV (16 years) Gender: Female Physical Description: Viridiana is exactly 5’0 and weighs 110lbs. She has about waist lenght wavy, black hair with purple highlights and almond shaped (usually)spilt-colored eyes. Left/Right Eyes: Red on side and Blue on the other. While her face has her ancestors common rounded features they are far from delicate, more angular and sharp (due do this people often mistake her for older than she is), almost leaving her with a perpetual mischievous expression (which suits her just fine). Her skin is light olive and bruises easily. Character Concept: Viridiana has exuberant personality. Commonly known for being full of laughter and mischief. She weighs every word and action heavily for she believes that there should never be a regret in life and one should always know the consequences of an action before doing or saying anything (this often results in her not being able to say exactly what she thinks or blatantly changing the subject, though her eyes often give her away), people often mistake her for being shifty or up to something…though they aren’t always wrong about that; she believes there is no right or wrong only what is met with peace in your own heart and mind. She tends to come across as a little too hyper and babble about nonsense when bored or nervous. She cries, screams, laughs and yells freely as she believes one should never hold these things in but she knows there is a time and place for everything. She enjoys making up intricate tales but her passion is dancing, she could never live without sweets and tends to overindulge and frequently becomes sick as a result. Viridiana’s dislikes change frequently as her moods, one day she may greatly dislike Myrian for (what she feels) is their disregard of life, while the next day she would try to make friends with one. Though one thing that never changes is her passionate dislike of anything sour and the word no. Character History:[/color][/font][/b] Viridiana was born in the Snowsong hold in the Season of Summer, Day 4 in the Year of 495 AV. Most of her childhood was spent outdoors caring in the ice and rolling the snow with her parents Kelvic Polar Bear. Hating being kept indoors she frequented colds and visits to the Whitevine for Frostnip, Chilblains and Trench Foot. She grew friendly and with an open mind, but often grew bored when cooped up inside leading to many mysterious pranks gone wrong. Growing up around music she found a great passion in ballads but found her voice was far from musical and began to try to find other ways to tell her stories and turned to dance. Even from a young age she found it came to her with ease as she grew older her love for it only developed as did her need to travel. With every story and visitor that came to Avanthal she felt the urge to explore to see the places they spoke of, to meet the people she had only seen in glimpses as they stayed. She wishes to know everything to create the greatest dance and story ever made; Something that will carve her name in history. And until she turned 15 she had never told her parents of this desire she only honed her skill in hunting and often traveled farther away from her hold than necessary in preparation for her departure. Now at 16 years old Viridiana does not wish to marry, she wishes for permission to explore, for she would rather become an Icemaiden than never see the world. Her parents take this news badly, for she is their only child but they can’t deny her for this very same reason and solemnly they allow her to pack her bags in hopes she will come home just as swiftly as she leaves. Training & Skill Points   Skills Skills SP/RB Earned Total Rank Hunting +5 +0 10 Novice Musical Composition +5 +0 0 Novice Medicine +5 +0 5 Novice Long Bow +10 +0 10 Novice Story Telling +10 +0 10 Novice Carving +10 +0 10 Novice Dance +15 +0 15 Novice   Languages Vani – Fluent Common – Basic Tukant – Broken   Lore Lore of… SP Earned Akalak Folktales x -- Babbling x -- Equipment/Possessions & Ledger:   Possessions Item Cost SP/Thread Acquired Description of Item 1 Large Tent -- SP Large tarp, 100 ft of rope, flint & steel, lantern, 2 torches, bedroll, blanket, fishing tackle & hooks, a riding horse(Avanlathian Sleigh Horse), a full set of tack, and a large set of saddlebags 1 Set of clothing -- SP Heavy Red Black Cloak, Fur Line Leather Shoes, Thin Charcoal Colored Wool Leggings, Loose Simple White Dress, Chest and Leg Bindings & Arm and Leg Warmers 1 Waterskin -- SP -- I Backpack -- SP Comb, Brush, Razor, Soap; Food for a Week; Flint & Steel; 1 Eating Knife Frozen Light -- Heirloom(SP)   Ledger Item Deposit Withdrawal End Balance SP Funding 100gm--0sm--0cm 0gm—0sm—0cm -- Current Balance ---- ---- 100gm—0sm—0cm Thread List: {Flaschback}Stuck In The Snow{Solo} Lazy Bones(Open)[/frametrans]

[Tattoo]

Hello Generic Name and Welcome to Mizahar,

I'm Tattoo, the Character Sheet Liaison, which means I'm the official 'helper' here in the CS forum. I noticed some things about your CS that need improvement. I know it can be a struggle wading through all the lore and getting your character in playable shape - starting with the CS. That's where I come in.

The first issue I see is in your Skills. You have a total of 70 skill points which is too many. As a Vantha, you receive +10 Carving OR +10 Storytelling, and 50 points to do with as you please for a total of 60 points. Please deduct 10 points from your current skill set.

The second issue is the Lore of Akalak Fairytales. Fairies neither exist in Mizahar nor do they exist in the imaginations of Mizahar citizens. Perhaps change Fairytales to Folktales?

The third issue is your heirloom item. That item would require the use of at least two Magics and would far outweigh the 50gm heirloom price limit. Please change this. If you'd like to request a price for the item, submit a request to the Item Price Request thread in the World Development Forums.

Everything else looks great. Please make the appropriate changes to your CS and PM me, I'll remove this post. Thank you for the CS and I look forward to reading your posts. Welcome to Mizahar