Cablance

[cablance]

Cablance Basic Information Race: Inarta Birthday & Age : 19 Gender: Male With red hair coming from the trait of the Inarta, Cablance is skilled with the classic bow. After years of training, he had become a cunning soldier and was tasked to guard the boundaries of Mount Skyinarta. Complete with fair skin and durable limbs, he can run at an impressive speed. Although he only stands at 5'6 and weighs 98 pounds. Normally quiet and serious, Cablance only opens up to those he trusts. Often only observing his sorroundings, he never hesitates to help those who are in dire need. Due to a scarring childhood, he only does his job not because he loves his race but only for the balance of the entire world. Orphaned at the young age of 12, Cablance trained his mind to only focus on one goal: Balance above all else. Only helping due to the fact that those who are in trouble may help him in his goal, although he only opens to those close to him. His only mission: To help others to preserve balance, to take out those who step out of line. Starting: Bow Mastery: 20 pts Dexterity: 20 pts Bow Crafting: 25 pts Starting: 1 set of cheap clothing(Includes a tattered cloak and low quality greaves) A bottle of water Toiletries(Comb, showering materials, etc) A week worth of food A poor quality short-bow 50 pcs. of wooden arrows( easily breakable) Utensils 100 Miza -20 Miza for buying materials for arrows Thread List: None yet

[Tattoo]

Hello Cablance and Welcome to Mizahar,

I'm Tattoo, the Character Sheet Liaison, which means I'm the official 'helper' here in the CS forum. I noticed some things about your CS that need improvement. I know it can be a struggle wading through all the lore and getting your character in playable shape - starting with the CS. That's where I come in.

The first thing I notice is your skills. As an Inarta, your receive +10 in a Specific Bow, OR +10 in Falconry OR +10 in Glassbowing, and 50 points to do with as you please, for a total of 60 points. You currently have 65 points, and need to deduct 5.

The second thing is your skills' names. Since you've purchased a short bow, your skill "Bow Mastery" needs changed to Weapon: Shortbow. Your skill "Dexterity" may be better labeled as Acrobatics, and "Bow Crafting" is Bowing.

The third thing is,

After years of training, he had become a cunning soldier and was tasked to guard the boundaries of Mount Skyinarta

I recommend you review the Social Structure of Inarta for this seems highly unlikely.

The fourth thing is your lack of languages. Starting out, you can have up to 3 languages, one Fluent, one Basic, and one Poor. I recommend Nari, the language of Inarta, and Common, the most used language in Mizahar.

The fifth thing is a lack of Lores. I recommend Lore of Inarta Society and Lore of Inarta History (Basic).

The sixth thing is your equipment and ledger. You need to properly deduct the costs of your shortbow and arrows via the Price list. You could also designate your shortbow as an heirloom item, and get it for free, but you must label it as heirloom.

Finally, the currency in Wind Reach is Pinions, not Mizas.

Everything else looks great. Please make the appropriate changes to your CS and PM me, I'll remove this post. Thank you for the CS and I look forward to reading your posts. Welcome to Mizahar