[Note by Kraken] Crystian

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Crystian

Postby Crystian on January 21st, 2013, 9:16 pm

Name: Crystian
Birthday: 71st of Summer 497
Age: 15
Race: Human, Adopted Drykas
Gender: Male

Lost Past, Bard, Keeper of Ancient Knowledge

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Physical Description:

He dressed in garb pleasing to the fashionable eye, yet fit for the life of a wanderer; clothes typically worn by those of higher society, yet each piece unique in that it may serve a certain situational necessity and purpose. This garb was colored in light greens, yellows, and gold, with dark midnight blues, creamy whites, and leathered browns scattered throughout. His hands were lashed with cloth from knuckle to wrist, further covered by slender vambraces and cuffs of Drykas Leather. This leaves exposed only his long slender, yet strong and dexterous, fingers, thumbs, wrists, and some of his forearms. His wrists and forearms were skinny yet toned and defined, attached to upper arms with firm triceps and shoulders. Draped over those shoulders was a long hooded cloak, draping well past his lower back. A left shoulder guard of Drykas Leather sits atop his cloak on that side. Underneath his essential garb was plain, yet of rich silks and linens, reinforced where need be. This is topped with a guarding chest piece of Drykas Leather as well. His belt capable of harboring whatever items or utensils he felt necessary. His ankles and sometimes lower calves were wrapped and boots or soft moccasin shoes were more often than not worn out of necessity for travel. Regardless of which were worn, his lower knees were covered in Drykas Leather Greaves. All his clothing and armor was trimmed and embroidered with delicate and precise patterns. The two items he carried most consistently with him were a small handmade knife of solid metal and a white oak engraved lute with works of ivory and strings, knobs, and plugs of gold he received from his mother. His shoulders were broad, at their centerpiece a long slender neck, the crowning jewel his head with all its intricacies, both inside and out. His hair was long, yet above shoulder length, with curls and waves intricately woven throughout its thick body. His eyebrows were thicker, and defined, yet despite this he lacked the ability to grow much facial hair, and typically kept clean shaven. His eyes were slender giving him a lazy appearance, yet could be opened wide. They are colored Hazel, a shattering mix of a light brown halo around his pupil and bright green shards all pointing outwards his black pupil. High cheekbones, a muscular and defined yet subtly shaped jaw, and light skin made him appear almost princely. His chest, solid from exercise and a harsh lifestyle led down to a narrow waist filled in between with a wide ribcage and centered by large solid abdominal muscles. The placement of his Windmark was small, lying on the center of, and crawling up, his lower back. The largest, most muscular part of his body were his legs, although by no means large, they showed definition, strength and power beneath his otherwise slender 5’10” 150lb frame.

Typical Garb & Lute
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Character History:

Crystian’s past is mostly a mystery, even to himself. He was simply found one day at the tender age of 10 by a Drykas Pavilion of the Topaz Clan. About the only things he can remember from his distant childhood are flashes of imagery and the stories and songs his mother used to whisper to him in the Ancient Tongue. Either through repression of his own doing or some magical tampering Crystian has forgotten most of his childhood before he was found by the Drykas. The only clues to his past are that his first language was the Ancient Tongue, he recalls only select amounts of lore from Ancient times, and the intricate Lute he has that his mother used to play to him.

The night before Crystian was found it had been storming fiercely with Zulrav’s might sweeping the plains. He was all alone with only his mother’s lute for comfort. The prickling rain and piercing winds would have most likely killed the naked boy were it not for a lone passing Strider running through the storm. This Strider shielded Crystian from the winds and kept him warm with its own body heat all throughout the night. The next day when Crystian was found by a Pavilion of the Topaz Clan, the large Purebred Strider was seen vigilantly standing guard next to him, having chosen Crystian. The Ankal of the Pavilion took this as an omen that Crystian was destined to be Drykas, and adopted him as part of his Pavilion.

Having already been chosen by a Strider, Crystian was given his Windmark at the young age of 12 after learning the basic customs of the Drykas people and initially finding his place as a Webber amongst them. However, the more astute Mystics among his Pavilion picked up on his deeper connection to the Ancient world and higher natural reserves of Djed. Deciding instead that his talents would best be put to use as a Loremaster and Keeper of Ancient Knowledge they taught him the ways of various Personal and World Magics. After a while they began to rely on him to accumulate more knowledge about the Ancient Drykas through his own unique and innate connection to the Ancient world so that it could be shared as part of their history, laws, and philosophies.

While much still is unknown about his past, perhaps by virtue of his own Ancient nature he was meant to fit within the bloodlines of the Drykas who are an ancient and survived race themselves.

Training & Skill Points:

Magic:
[Auristics] 5 *SP = 5
[Projection] 5 *SP = 5
[Voiding] 5 *SP = 5
[Flux] 5 *SP = 5
[Glyphing] 5 *SP = 5
[Webbing] 5 *SP = 5

Skills:
[Acrobatics] 5 *SP = 5
[Unarmed Combat] 5 *SP = 5
[Wilderness Survival] 5*SP = 5
[Play Musical Instrument] 5 *SP = 5
[Riding] 10 *RB = 10

Lore:

Lore: Ancient Songs & Epic Sagas
Lore: Dominion

Languages:

Ancient Tongue (Fluent)
Common (Basic)
Pavi (Poor)

Equipment:

1 Set of Clothing (Cloak & Footwear included)
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack containing:
1 Set of Toiletries (comb, brush, razor, soap)
7 Days Rations
1 Small Handmade Knife
Flint & Steel

White Oak Lute, Custom Make (Family Heirloom)

Leather Vambraces (Drykas)
Leather Greaves (Drykas)
Leather Chest/Breastplate (Drykas)
Leather Joints, Full Set (Drykas)

Pair of Trim & Embroidered Leather Moccasins

Yvas
Saddlebags, Large
Bonded Cyphrus Strider (Purebred)
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Rope, 100ft
Half Hatchet
Fishing Kit
Torch x2
Bedroll
Blanket, Winter
Tent, one person
Extra Waterskin

Mortar and Pestle
Sewing Kit

Vial, Ink x2
Detail Brush
Quill
Charcoal, 20 sticks
Book, Blank x3

Card Deck

Dagger
Rapier

Money:

100 *SP
500 *SP
-10 Leather Vambraces (Drykas) *SP
-12 Leather Greaves (Drykas) *SP
-32 Leather Chest/Breastplate (Drykas) *SP
-30 Leather Joints, Full Set (Drykas) *SP
-5.4 Trim & Embroidered Leather Moccasins
-5 Extra cost of Lute past 50 gm *SP
-25 Gold Lute Strings, Knobs, and Plugs & Ivory Engravements *SP
-2 Yvas *SP
-8 Saddlebags, Large *SP
-2 Rope, 100ft *SP
-1 Mortar and Pestle *SP
-18 Sewing Kit *SP
-2 Vial, Ink x2 *SP
-0.5 Detail Brush *SP
-0.05 Quill *SP
-0.1 Charcoal, 20 sticks *SP
-0.4 Half Hatchet *SP
-10 Fishing Kit *SP
-0.04 Torch x2 *SP
-0.1 Bedroll *SP
-0.5 Blanket, Winter *SP
-2 Tent, one person *SP
-1 Extra Waterskin *SP
-9 Book, Blank x3 *SP
-5 Card Deck *SP
-2 Dagger *SP
-20 Rapier *SP
Total: 396.91

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Crystian

Postby Mirage on January 27th, 2013, 9:15 pm

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First and foremost don't panic! I am here to help you out with a few mistakes on your CS. Don't worry you are not in trouble :)

1) I get that your character does not know his past, but I am afraid in order to start off with Nadar-Canoch as your fluent language you will have to provide a much more detailed history you how and why he knows this long lost language better than he can speak common. Whether or not he knows it as a PC doesn't matter, but it helps the players and staff to better help you in the future if you can provide that. A side note Nadar-Canoch is not widely known, and very very few people outside of the older races even know it exists. That being the case your history should take into account just how unlikely it is for your PC at the age of 15 to have a complete mastery of its intricate and ancient structure. Nuits study decades and still do not have a complete mastery of the language, so for a human boy to be fluent at it so early is highly unlikely. I would suggest instead switching it to your basic language instead of your fluent. That is much more easily justified in your history.

2) Lore: Ancient Songs & Epic Sagas and Lore: Types of Ancient Magics are not appropriate lores. In fact I do not even know what you mean by Ancient songs and Ancient magics. There are lost disciplines in Mizahar, but these can only be acquired through extensive RP and with permission from your local ST's. A lore is supposed to be a fact or a bit of knowledge which cannot be built upon any further, such as the specific temperature at which to bake a cake. Please edit these lores to more appropriate ones.

3) Animated Avatars are not allowed on Mizahar. Please change your current Avatar to a more appropriate one.

PM me if you have any questions, and when all sections are fixed I will remove this intervention and you will be OK to start RPing once more. Have a great day :)

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