[Issues found by Gossamer] Grey Creature

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Grey Creature

Postby Grey Creature on May 25th, 2013, 4:31 am

PC Name’s: Grey Creature
Physical Information:
Race: Kelvic
Birthday & Age: 19 years old
Gender: Female
Physical Description: Grey is 5'5'' and is about 125 pounds. Brown hair that only touches her shoulders, it looks a bit orange in a certain light. Her hair is also a bit curly and her bangs just reaches over her eyes so they're rarely ever seen. One eye is black and the other is grey. Contrary to popular belief, the black eye is actually her blind eye from birth and it is why she hides behind her bangs. She is a red panda kelvic that likes to be as free as possible so she often wears little clothing. She will always be seen in shorts and a shirt with a hood.
Character Concept:
Personality - Although Grey is 19, she is actually very childlike in that her only needs are ever food and a place to sleep. She doesn't worry about predators even though she would hardly ever fight. She has a sweet and genuine smile but can also be very blunt without realizing. Being a red panda, she is very self-conscious about being shorter and pudgier than what she would consider 'normal' and since most people think of panda as cute, cuddly (but mainly fat) creatures, she always blurts out at random times that "RED pandas are actually closer related to foxes!" in order to not bring anyone's hopes down when she ever shifts. (But even then, she thinks that foxes are cooler than red pandas.)
Ethics - Being that she is one of caring nature, she always wants to make sure others have enough to eat before she completely pigs out herself. She is often seen eating all-vegetarian meals and declining meat despite saying she is not a vegetarian. (As a red panda, she tends to eat her weight in food and is always looking for food.)
Likes - Grey enjoys being in peaceful places because they speak to her more nature-wise.
Dislikes - She hates being around loud, obnoxious people who only point out other's flaws. It turns the atmosphere sour and she hates it when she can't enjoy herself because then her stomach will twist into knots and she can't eat. (And she will NOT have that!)
Character History (Optional But Recommended):
Pre-Creation - Your PCs Childhood and life before the age you started playing them.
All Grey ever remembered was water- and lots of it. She was constantly surrounded by water in Ravok with her parents. The taunting started when she discovered she couldn't swim very well. She could only swim while in animal form and she didn't even really enjoy it that much. Since swimming was something her parents were proud of, they weren't sure how to feel about their daughter not being able to swim. At first, it was just a few jokes. But then, as Grey grew and she was not able to do as well in math or other simple education, they grew harsher. Being incompetent terrified her to the point of not wanting to try anything- which only became worse. At one point, they moved a little farther out in the city to hide Grey's inabilities. Just on the outskirts, while Grey was off deeper in the city to get food, a flood surged up and overtook her parents. When she came back, the only words replayed in her head were her parents last ones "Can you manage to get food or are you too lazy for that as well?"
Post Creation _ What happened to your PC in game as you play them.
Grey has been traveling for some time now, when she discovered how much thinner she was getting. Any other time, it would have been fine, but it was starting to dawn on her that she might need to actually get food. But she needs money to buy food. So now, looking for work, she heard of jobs opening up in Sunberth and being that the name sounded like a peaceful one, she started heading for there right now.
Training & Skill Points:
Starting Package (Initial Skills/Points)
+15 Foraging
+10 Unarmed combat
Earned Skill/Points:
Equipment/Possessions (Required)
1 Set of Clothing (cloak/coat & footwear included)
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
1 Set of Toiletries (comb, brush, razor, soap)
Food for a week or 1 bottle of embalming fluid (for Nuits)
1 eating knife
Flint & Steel
Ledger (Required)
100 gold mizas.
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Grey Creature

Postby Gossamer on May 25th, 2013, 7:32 am

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Hi there.

First off, I’ve marked your CS with serious issues because it indeed has serious issues. Until you have the red X removed from your CS, you are unable to post anywhere. The following needs to be corrected before this character is suitable for play.

Mizahar has strict naming rules. You need a real name, not a name like Grey Creature. By registering with Mizahar and creating an account, you agree to these rules. They can be found in the wiki page titled Rules. Please read them to get a better idea of what you can and can’t use as a name. Grey Creature is completely inappropriate.

It’s not possible for you to be Kelvic and 19. Lifespands of red pandas irl are 8-10 years in the wild and 14-18 years in captivity. Nineteen would make you ancient.

Skills. You need 50 starting points in skills. Currently you only have 25 spent. You also get a racial bonus of 10 points to start out your PC with.. Those points must be spent in Hunting or Foraging.

You need two lores. You currently have none.

You need three languages, one you know well, one you can converse in, and one you know a smattering of. Currently you have none listed.

You also need a family heirloom worth 50 gold or less.

You need something to call shelter, be it a tent or a house. If you cash this in, you get a +500 gold to add to your starting 100. If you don’t cash this in you must show housing.

Fix these things, PM me, and I will remove the intervention.

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