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Shoki Kyoki SSin -

Postby SanitySample on November 2nd, 2017, 12:23 am

Shoki Kyoki SSin


Appearance

Race: [Dhai + Symenestra] Mixed
Gender: Female
Age: 21
Birthday: 26 , Spring, 496.
Birthplace: Endrykas

Appearance: Silky shoulder length hair. Sharp features that bring your pale skin and statue-like bright yellow stare snake eyes. Maybe it was because of the scales that line your cheeks ears and just above your eyebrows ending on the bridge of your nose or maybe its the two sets of fangs that hang from your mouth but you are far from beautiful. Hiding your face may be easy but with that lanky body of yours you look a lot more male than female. Scales outlining your figure as they peer the sharp claws make it hard for people not to judge you. You can't blame them.

Character Concept

As curious as a cat, but just as mysterious, witty, and sneaky as a snake. What types of troubles can a person get into in one lifetime? Well right at this moment a lot. You've stolen some money, you've scammed. Why would anybody want to trust you, maybe it's how well you can hold a secret or how deadly you truly are.

Character History

You were raised by two loving parents but you decided to run away. Just because you wanted to see something more, something a bit less isolated. You were an idiot, running away from the only people who loved you senseless. Now was that worth it? You've stolen from the poor for your own selfish needs, you've scammed people who might have needed a fair deal. You were getting guiltier as time past. Maybe that's why you've traveled so far, so you could start again. Maybe, just maybe make your kind more loved and appreciated.

Language

Fluent Language: Symenos
Basic Language: Snake tounge
Poor Language: Common


Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Poision 10 - SP 100 Novice
Acrobatics 10 - SP 100 Novice
Running 3 - SP 100 Novice


Lores
Lore of The Black Sun
Lore of Religion: The Voice

Possessions

1 Set of Clothing
-Simple Shirt
-Simple Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Simple Cloak or Coat
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Wood)
-Brush (Wood)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

[b]Heirloom:
Fill me in, please! (HELPFUL HINT, Please Remove - Max. 50gm worth)

Housing

Location:

House: She travels mostly, so she basically just lives off a backpack her mother crafted.

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM
Housing + 500 GM 600 GM
Knife, Spider throwing -10 GM 590 GM
Leather, Night -60 GM 530 GM
Robe, Kalena -20 GM 520 GM
Book, Blank -3 GM 517 GM
Quill -5 GM 512 GM
Horse, Heavy -200 GM 312 GM
Blanket And Hood, Horse, Huge -18 GM 294 GM
Saddle, Riding -10 GM 284 GM
Saddle, Light Cavalry -12 GM 272 GM
(5) Feed, 10lbs -50 cm 271 GM, 9 SM, 50 CM


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Last edited by SanitySample on November 2nd, 2017, 9:48 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Shoki Kyoki SSin -

Postby Gossamer on November 2nd, 2017, 4:04 am

Hi there

Before you start Miz you need to do some fine tuning of your Character Sheet and your account.

First off your account name and your character name needs to match. Sanity Sample is not an appropriate site name. Shoki Kyoki, while not exactly Dhani or Sym, is fine for an account name.

I don't know what the heck SSin Means. If that's a last name, fine, but write it like a last name and not like your PC would pronounce it.

There are only two genders on Miz. Male or Female. There is no agender.

Character sheets must be factual and not full of questions. Please make your Appearance clear and concise.... not the rambling mess it is now.

Please create a legitimate character concept and write it out clearly.

Please fill out your history without vague generalities.

When crafting your skill list, please write own where the XP came from. For example, Poison should say 10/100 - 10 SP (sp for starting package).
Acrobatics should read 10. I don't know what the heck 0,3 means under Running. You can't have less than 5 xp in anything.

You can't start with a huge general lore of The Black Sun. Nor can you know about the voice unless you were in ravok during Voice events.

Housing? It needs to be listed even if you are living out of a backpack. Location? Syka? No. You aren't remotely skilled correctly to survive in Syka.

Anything you buy needs to be added to your possessions list.

If this CS isn't a total joke, correct it all and PM me and I will remove this intervention. :)

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