Mind Games...

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Center of scholarly knowledge and shipwrighting, Zeltiva is a port city unlike any other in Mizahar. [Lore]

Mind Games...

Postby Noaru on July 12th, 2012, 5:47 pm

77th Summer, 512 A.V.

* A black veils being pulled over Zeltiva; he could sense it, he could feel the coldness seeping through the earth towards him, approaching to embrace him. The world above grew still; naturally, things would become still within the presence of darkness! Their vision blurred, their other senses will be heightened from anxiety or sheer anticipation! For what, you may ask? One could only fathom what thoughts encircled the minds of those fearful of the dark, and of those lurking within it.


There remains a man; he's quite fearful of the dark and with good reason to, he stumbles upon something he'd never imagine that he would, something that while treading upon darkness--hidden under the cover of night discovers a man that caught its eye. A few were capable of doing such, these few were societies lowest and he had discovered one of them, a human thief.


The man runs through the alley way, glancing back to see if his pursuer was still there; he see's nothing but he could feel something there, rushing towards him, wanting to submerge him in darkness. He trips and falls, stumbling as he tries to get back to his feet but then that which was chasing him, was now upon him and he could feel its cold breath on his neck!

'' I'm just imagining things, its not there! its not truly there! This is all but a lie, making itself known before my consciousness!''

The man shouts and briefly afterwords, he receives an answer.

When humans, discover that the truth they seek doesn't suit them, they deceive themselves by calling it, a lie...


The man turns and see's before him two white eyes lingering within the darkness, observing him; they approached him, getting closer, ever so closer. He could feel the presence before him as his body stiffens, as if, it was imprisoned in ice. The cold chill from this beings presence surged through his legs, numbing his entire body; his heart races as everything goes black.*
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Postby Noaru on July 12th, 2012, 8:24 pm

* The middle age man wakes from his slumber in a cold sweat; he remembers the encounter from yesterday, it haunts him in his dreams; he awakes in the middle of the night sometimes and see's the creature that nearly took his life that faithful night in the corner of the room smiling but when he reaches for a candle and shines light within the corner, it simply vanishes before it can be seen.

I can be the light that surrounds you with warmth or that particular darkness that submerges you in despair!


He jumps from the bed, as his wife opens the room door ''Honey,whats wrong? You don't look to well.'' She asks. her husband with a look of concern. ''I'm fine, there's no need to worry'' He says. in response to his wife while placing his palms upon his face, ''Are you sure? She asks. with a smile.

I'm just... Wha! What is this! Your not my wife!

He's then grabbed by this ''creature'' disguised as his wife and strangled, he could hear the maniacal laughter echoing inside his head, he screams and once more everything becomes black.
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Postby Noaru on July 14th, 2012, 11:17 pm

* Noaru manifests within the room, he awaits for the human male to awake from his slumber, he could see what he had done to the man: a thing that couldn't be undone by anyone else but those deemed ''special'' by the Gods themselves! This these nightmares, delusions and hallucinations are not natural these dark aspects were implanted within Ken's psyche through the use of tormenting mind games.


Ken opens his eyes, awakening yet again from dreams within nightmares trapped within a nightmares! He couldn't bare the thought of sleep, it terrified him: especially that recurring dream of him being chased by that bestial entity! The tired man lies within his bed seemingly at peace with the silence inside his room; birds chirping, children at play, and the eerie feeling that someone was watching him from the shadows; it was a glories day.... Wait! What!



Noaru steps from the shadows, he was naturally capable of blending in with darkness and the blackness that accompanied it. Indeed, in nature he was a dark spirit one that takes delight in nothingness, blackness and oblivion! But also, he is a light spirit, promoting change and courage within souls. In reality he is a neutral existence.

The black bestial entity that was Noaru approached Ken; he knew Ken's life style as an expert thief and decided to ''haunt'' this individual in order to teach him how it felt to have something precious taken from him! And in this lesson Ken would have one thing taken from him, his sanity...
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Postby Noaru on July 15th, 2012, 10:09 pm

Ken: What are you, some kind of beast or demon or some sort!? Ken says. In response to Noaru's sudden appearance; he was definitely one of those individuals who have never seen a spiritual entity let alone, something of Noaru's sort.


Noaru: No, I'am what you humans call a ''ghost'' But, I'am indeed a spirit! Those who I reveal myself to are individuals in desperate need of a change and you are one of these individuals I have chosen. Noaru says. In response to Ken.


* Noaru could feel the young mans anxiety and fear, who couldn't? It literally oozed from the young mortals soul! Noaru couldn't help but smile revealing his many menacing teeth, this frightened Ken so much so that he takes a swing at Noaru. He fails badly, as Noaru blinks to avoid the fist and then he throws a spoon from the table square between Ken's eyes.*


Ken: I....I don't understand. I'm in need of a desperate need of a change: why?

Noaru: The life of a thief is an uncertain one, you are constantly faced with the uncertain reality of life and yet you continue to steal and deprive others of their precious memories of which they've stored in those items you have stolen . The words I speak to you now human, will not be spoken again understand them quickly before it is to late. I will see you tonight human and I will show you what futures lie ahead.

Ken: Wait....What, something will happen to me? What will happen!?

* Noaru disappears without answering Ken's question, leaving the poor man in suspense.*
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Postby Noaru on July 16th, 2012, 8:13 am

Take this time to consider your actions; carefully, listen to that which can not be heard with the ears but with your heart can you hear it soundly without obscurity and doubt plaguing your thoughts!


Noaru: Heed my words! There lies great evil in this world but constantly you humans fail to notice this great evil: an evil that compels one to fall prey to their basis instincts and dark thoughts. I have come to save you mortal! for the greatest foe you will ever face will be yourself!


Ken: I don't understand! Why are you telling me this so suddenly! He says with tears rolling down his cheeks. Don't preach to me like you know everything, you know nothing about me! What can you tell me about change? When you yourself can never change! He shouts.


Noaru: I can simply let you die and go about my business: however, I will not do such a thing. I will give you the chance to take back your life and leave your life of darkness behind! He says sternly. I will lead you, mold you into a brighter man this night! Now behold, there lies you new life ahead of you what do you see ahead?


Ken: I... I can see my wife and children, their... their waving towards me I can hear their voices, Kate, Leonard and Casandra: Oh my dear beloved wife Cassandra!

* He could see his children standing within the door way of his home. A place he hasn't been to in awhile as he walked towards the house he is stopped by Noaru who appears before in front of him, holding a small pen using his soulmist.*

Noaru: Now, though I have led you this far and showed you brief but disturbing things in the beginning of this chapter, do you regret that you took the hard route than the simple path?

Ken: He smiles. I would have never thought that I would have a ghost becoming a leader-like role model in my life! Thank you, despite me and my wife breaking up sometime ago she seems happy what did you say to her?

Noaru: He grins. I did a little talking to her and discovered a few things and allowed her to see that second chances have some perks.

* He then turns, leaving the pen with Ken and his wife and children.*

Ken: Wait! May I know your name spirit?

Noaru: I'am Noaru, now go your family awaits you.
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Postby Noaru on July 16th, 2012, 8:41 am



It was as if a sweet melody was being played an arrhythmic flow like no other took over this peaceful scene. A man hugging his children, their tears revealed not a trace of sadness but only sheer rejoice and happiness

I will spread my wings and close my eyes. I will await for you! Oh lovely wind, let us fly one more time! For without you I fall. So, hold me tight as I feel your touch along my neck, take me with you; don’t forget! Let me fly a top with you! Through the sky below the sun and as you kept your promise and made me cry tears of happiness; you let me fly away from here, lets be together once more; take me to your paradise.

This epic example. It was this epic example that created a significant change within these soul! These departed spirits, who believed they lived and slept and went about their lives as ''normal'' human beings. This family of spirits torn from each other through unforeseen circumstances shall never know the true meaning behind their deaths but now they can have each other.


Ken: So, this is what you meant huh? I wasn't going to ''die'' but I was this whole time failing to realize that I was already dead. I thank you for reuniting me with my family; why don't you come with us to the next life?

Noaru: I see that you finally understand and that pen there belonged to you when you were alive. The house that I found you sleeping in had it and I believed it had some significant meaning! But for now, I can not leave there are many things I must discover, resolve and understand before passing onto the new life.

Ken: I see... Well, thank you my friend: maybe, we can talk casually next time in the next world.

Noaru: He smiled. Yeah, maybe we can be on better terms as well.

* Ken and Noaru parts ways; one joining his family in the next life, the other disappearing into the darkness--cloaked by the shadows themselves.*
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Postby Paragon on July 23rd, 2012, 11:20 pm

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Frankly, I found this difficult to read. I was utterly confused with what was going on. Your formatting (which I've mentioned before) is screwed up in several ways, namely random use of asterix's and suddenly turning into some sort of playscript when you hit dialogue. Unfortunately this undermines any creative ideas in your writing, as I find it very difficult to follow. Please, please, try to improve upon your general presentation in future so I can read and enjoy Noaru's stories. - if you have ANY questions or concerns about this grading, don't hesitate to PM me.
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