Completed [Colbalt Moutains]Pride of A Hunter

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Stretching northward along the coastline of the Suvan Sea, the Cobalt Mountains are the home of the Bronze Wood, numerous ruins, and creatures both strange and fantastical.

[Colbalt Moutains]Pride of A Hunter

Postby Sei Tendo on August 22nd, 2013, 6:08 pm

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Sei trotted down the path of the Broonze Woods, driven by it's bronze and golden leaves. He stalked the trees, lurking in empty corners, and stayed silent as not to alert prey of his presence. He walked idily by, ignoring the chatter near the city gates as he passed. He started to jog, leaning into his hunting position. He continued to slink the path until a nearby boar caught his attention. He stopped jogging and stared at the boar.

Sei trotted nearby, careful to avoind twigs that could snap and alert his prey. He started to jog again, and slipped neatly into a sprint. As he closed the distance he lost sight of the boar, it had most likely started up the path. He liked the feel of the wind in his fur, lurking along the path behind the boar. He stalked it quietly, awaiting a stop.

Sei watched as the boar dipped it's head and lifted to smell the air. It grazed a bit and moved on, as he continued his pursuit. He inched closer and closer, flowing with the boars movements and found it's patterns. He knew th e boar could smell him, but it couldn't see him, for although he was trailing behind it, he stayed in the trees. The constant thump of him jumping from branch to branch was starting to frighten the boar.

Sei let out a low, gutteral growl that would alert the boar, but give it that far away feel. Instead the boar was more frightened and took off running. It stampeded away, confused on why it was running, but driven by it's insticts. He inspected the the branches before plopping onto them, and managed to get to the ground. He jogged at a low pace, sniffing the air to locate the boar.

North, a few meters away. Sei thought with a sniff. He sprinted north, keeping a steady breathing rate, and watched as his surroundings blurred before his eyes. The tree's turned into brown, bronze and golden blurs, as he went full speed after the boar. He knew if the boar got to far awy, he'd lose it, so he had to get to it before it was to late. He caught up to the boar, and slowed to a walk, flicking his eyes over the boar. Showtime..
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[Colbalt Moutains]Pride of A Hunter

Postby Sei Tendo on August 22nd, 2013, 9:54 pm

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Sei jumped on top of the boar, who was caught by surprise, and scraped it's skin. He knew he had to advise caution though, because if the boar was able to nail him with it's tusks, it was all over for him. He first jumped off the boar before it swung it's massive tusks, then he dug his claws deep inside of the boars left cheek with a large hiss, and moved back before the boar could knock him silly. He growled, lunged for the boar and cut his claws into the boars side.

The boar charged him but he sidepawed and scraped it's side. Before Sei could move however, the boar used it's weight and slammed his head into his exposed side, knocking him down. He groaned and stood up, growling at the boar who was frightened but willing to fight. He surged madly at the boar, cutting at it's hind leg with his claws, and judged by the painful squeal that he'd cut deep enough to hurt it. The boar painfully struck him with the injured leg, wincing, and bucked him in the face.

Sei winced as well, and was blown back by the force of impact. He stood shakily, and he could taste the blood in his mouth. He forcefully swallowed, and was about to leap for the boar when he realized it was gone. "Shyke it all!" He swore, but of course this was illegible to anyone around him, but he said it none the less. He sniffed the air and located the boar. As he began to sprint, he realized he'd blacked out for a least a minute, thus giving the boar time to escape. He swallowed the blood and moved on.

Sei ran faster than he knew he could, pushing himself, and willing his body to keep advancing. He chased after the hunk of pork, his vision blurring in and out of focus, and his heart pounded against his ears and chest. When the boar came into focus he slowed once more into a walk, steadying his breath and avoiding rash movements. He clawed the dirt, letting his claws sink deep into the cool soil. He jogged toward the boar, ready to jump if need be, and growled inches away from it, clawing the same hind leg from before, and adding fresh soil to the wound. The boar cried and kicked in ta frenzy, the soil making the wound sting and burn, and as it kicked it narrowly missed Sei's face.

Sei slashed his claws against the boars' side, enjoying the thrill of the challenge. He jumped for the boar, sinking his long teeth deep into the skin tissue and past the fur. The boar twisted savagely, bucking, and arching it's back wildly. He took another swing at the boar, but left himself wide open as the boar kicked him in the chest, knocking the wind from his lungs. He gasped for air, and gulped it like water in the desert. He then sprang for the boar, got a good hold, and sunk his teeth into the boars neck. The boars eye's went emotionless and it collapsed in that very spot. He had severed the jugular on his first try.

The boar bled rapidly, all it's open wounds leaking blood like a waterfall. Sei gripped the boar by the neck, and spun around with it. He was exhausted and out of breath, and he could hardly stand. He groaned and walked shakily back to the Syliras main gates.

OOCI'm not sure if this is enough. I tried to incorporate all my hunting skills into this thread, and made it longer, but I'd love commentary. :)
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[Colbalt Moutains]Pride of A Hunter

Postby Radiant on September 12th, 2013, 9:51 pm

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Sei :
Experience
Skill XP Earned
Observation +1 XP
Stealth +1 XP
Hunting +1 XP
Unarmed Combat +1 XP


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Lore Earned
The Dangers Of Hunting A Boar: Tusks


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Notes :
It's a good short job thread, Sei. The fight is descriptive and enjoyable. My suggestion is that you put a more elaborate ending to the thread. Also, I recommend the thread to be about 3-4 posts long, you need to put more work as you are getting more and more skilled in your abilities. :)

Maybe some inner monologue to review what had just happened, his concerns for his own wounds, etc. :)


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