Alys and Roki

[Alys_Roki]

Alys and Roki [indent] Alys: Long, red hair with bright blue eyes like sapphires. Pale, silk like skin. Freckles going across her nose. Her eyelashes long and thick. Roki: Pure white stallion. Rippling muscles. Dark brown, chocolate eyes. Race: Human, soon to be Dryka Gender: Alys: Female Roki: Stallion Age: Alys: 17 Roki: 7 Birthday: Doesn't know Birthplace: Doesn't know Appearance: Alys: Long, red hair with bright blue eyes like sapphires. Pale, silk like skin. Freckles going across her nose. Her eyelashes long and thick. Roki: Pure white stallion. Rippling muscles. Dark brown, chocolate eyes. Character Concept Alys was orphaned at age 11 and had to teach herself everything. Roki came along as a scared colt ut soon warmed up to Alys. She is now his world, his heart and soul. Alys is wanting to be a Dryka, her father was one. She doesn't remember her family much but she remembers a horse and his 'windmarks' as he called them. Character History Alys was orphaned at age 11 and had to teach herself everything. Roki came along as a scared colt ut soon warmed up to Alys. She is now his world, his heart and soul. Language Fluent Language: English Basic Language: Fill me in, if you want. Poor Language: Fill me in, if you want. Skills [table2=#FFFFFF,#004080]Skill | EXP | Total | Proficiency Skill 1 | # SP | # | Novice in knife throwing Skill 2 | # SP | # | Moderate in Archery Lores Helpful Lores: (Pick 2) Lore of Riverfall Layout Lore of Dryka Lore of Religion: Kenash Lore of Religion: Akajia Possessions 1 Set of Clothing (Colorful) -Simple Shirt -Simple Pants -Simple Undergarments -Simple Cloak or Coat -Simple Boots 1 Waterskin 1 Backpack which contains: -Comb (Bone) -Brush (Bone) -Soap -Razor -Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth) -1 eating knife -Flint & Steel -Bow and arrows Heirloom: None Housing Location: No house. Travels. House: No house. Ledger http://www.mizahar.com/forums/post386623.html#p386623 Thread List indent]

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A Curse on You Until You Fix It

Alys,

I am going to have to prevent you from continuing to roleplay until you fix the following issues. Please feel free to PM me with questions about anything and I will do my best to help you.

1) Please fix the BBC code so that you don't have unclosed code. This is for aesthetic purposes to other players that might read your CS and to prevent any issues with forum code.

2) Spell check your work, as there are many issues.

3) Your fluent language is not English in Mizahar. Since your languages describe your character, in this case it would be something like 'Common' or another lanugage spoken in Mizahar. If you choose not to have a Poor or Basic language, you can delete them.

4) You need to differentiate your skill points based on the Skill List. The Starting Package goes into all the details. As a Human, you also get +15 skill points for a racial bonus. I have attached helpful links to get you started.

5) You must pick two lores.

6) You must decide on an heirloom worth less than or equal to 50 GM. This does not have to be family related, but something she found on her horse, etc.

7) Look at the Starting Package to establish a breed for Roki through the 'Housing' option. You will get full tack and some items in place of having an apartment to live in. I would take advantage of this. Living out in the Mizaharan wilderness is difficult, so I would consider some Skill Points in wilderness survival as well.

8) Read the starting package to compile your initial ledger.

Please take the time to read the lore and establish your CS before you continue RPing. Once you have these, please contact me via PM and I will take the intervention off your CS, at which point you can feel free to continue posting.[/list]