Diane O' Conner (Wip)

[Diane O'Conner]

Diane O'Conner Appearance Race: Human, Drykas Gender: Female Age: 23 years old Birthday: 17, Spring, 492 AV. Birthplace: Endrykas, Cyphrus Appearance: Skin: Medium Brown Hair: Long, wavy, dark brown Eyes: Hazel, average-sized Height: A little tall Weight: A bit pudgy Build: Average Character Concept Personality: Diane is quite funny sometimes when she feels like it, very kind, loves horse training, and loyal. Ethnics- Diane is very loyal and refuses to stop her work unless she just can't help it. Her work comes before anything else. Likes: She likes to explore different places and camp out under the stars, rainy days, helping others, having friends, and bonding with her horse Dislikes: loud people, and noisy people Goals: have amazing adventures Character History " My name is Diane O'Conner. I was born into a extremely small Pavilion made up of four people in total, including myself. This included my mother, Lorin, my father, Frinda, and the Aiko. Both of my parents were travelling teachers , and left to teach in some city without ever notifying either me or Aiko first quite often. As a child, even at the age of three, I felt that my parents disappearing wasn't something they should have been doing. By the time I had reached the age of four, my parents went against the Akio's direct orders, leaving once again for a city nearby to trade without telling anyone. What they didn't know was the group of merciless glassbeaks nesting nearby, and they paid for their ignorance with their lives. When I received the news of my parents' deaths, I was unable to shed even a tear, since I really knew nothing of them whatsoever, they never stayed around long enough before leaving to trade again. I was more angry with them than anything, because I had really been raised by Aiko, and I was furious that they had disobeyed a direct order given by the Akio. After the death of my parents, I was continued to be raised by Aiko, who taught me how to ride and care for my Strider, which I had bonded with at the age of eleven, how to draw, and basic swordsmanship. The one thing she hadn't been able to teach me thoroughly was navigational skills. Before he was able to, he had died of his old age, when I was twelve years old. Since then, I had learned to rely on only myself and my Strider, and forced myself to believe that I never needed anyone for anything, no matter what happened to me. Although, I did in fact get lost quite often, and that made me terribly vulnerable, and in that state of vulnerability, I was quick to accept help from others. Once out of this state, I would revert immediately and refuse and further help. In order for me to stay alive, I had taken up the occupation of been a teacher and a nanny for people with kids from different locations. In one particular case, I had went to a client house into the city of Riverfall shortly after my weapon broke while fighting off wild glassbeaks. With the money I had received from my mission, I set out to purchase a new weapon. I then came across a travelling parent who offered me a longbow made with steel not found in Riverfall. Little did I know that the steel was just the same as any other steel one would find. I had become too distracted by the romanticization of the magnificent weapon I was offered to analyze it further, and purchased the longbow with the money she had just earned." Language Fluent Language: Pavi Basic Language: Common Poor Language: Navi Skills Skill EXP Total Proficiency Teaching 10 SP 10 Novice Horsemanship 10 SP 10 Novice Riding 10RB, 20 SP 30 Competent Lores Lore of History of Endrykas Lore of the Importance of the Strider Possessions 1 Set of Clothing (Colorful) -Simple Shirt -Simple Pants -Simple Undergarments -Simple Cloak -Simple Boots 1 Waterskin 1 Backpack which contains: -Comb (Bone) -Brush (Bone) -Toothbrush (Bone) -Toothpaste -Soap -Razor -Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth) -1 eating knife -Flint & Steel 100 Gold Mizas Heirloom: Before her parents had died, he had giving her a Mixed Blood and a animal toolkit Housing Location: Endrykas, Cyphrus House: 1 large tent (4 person) 1 large tarp 100 ft of rope 1 lantern 2 torches 1 bedroll 1 blanket 1 set of fishing tackle & hooks 1 bonded Strider (Swallow) 1 Yvas 1 large set of Yvas bags Ledger Purchase Cost Total Starting +100 GM 100 GM Slingshot -6 SM 94 GM Slingshot bullets(10) 1 SM 93 GM Thread List Date Thread Status n/a n/a n/a

[Ragdoll]

Moderator Intervention

Hi Diane-I'm Ragdoll, Riverfall's current AS, and there are a few issues with your CS that need to be corrected before you can start playing.

• If Diane was born in Spring 514, she wouldn't even be a year old, let alone 23. Please change your birth date to reflect this unless you intend on playing an infant PC, in which case please change your age.
• It's highly unlikely a pavilion would ever be that small.
• The Aiko? Who is the Aiko? You use male and female pronouns for this person.
• The proper name for the skill Riding is Riding: Horse, unless you're talking about dog riding. In that case it would be Riding: Dog.
• Please pick a cloak or a coat. You can't have both.
• If her parents died when she was four, why would they give her a horse?
• You can only have one heirloom item-you have a horse and a tool kit.
• There's an edit button in the top right corner of your CS-instead of re-posting it every time you want to change it, just edit your post.

It's come to my attention that your whole CS is literally that of Tesni Sagevale's but with a few details changed. This is not okay. You need to come up with an original concept unless you're doing something like a sibling relationship. As you don't even have the same last name or same family names, I assume you aren't.

PM Ragdoll when you've corrected the above issues and this intervention will be removed.