[Issues found by Astator] Zeb

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Zeb

Postby Zeb on December 19th, 2015, 4:40 am

Zeb



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Race: Jamoura
Gender: Male
Age: 225
Birthplace: The Spires

Appearance: Unlike the average Jamoura, Zeb really, really, really likes dressing up. He sees the trappings of 'primitive' society as a exciting and colorful novelty, a hobby he should indulge as much as he can while he is away from The Spires. Consistently finding tailor-made clothing to accommodate his huge frame is, at best, expensive. At worst? Nigh impossible. Nonetheless, Zeb is never caught out and about without at least a snazzy, oversized hat - and who's gonna laugh at him? He's built like a bouncer's patron Alvina of Bouncing.

What set Zeb's appearance apart from the average Jamoura, besides his inclination towards clothing, is his above-average size, menacing face, and dead, milky eyes. He's no Rhysol crony, he just suffers from a severe case of 'Jamoura resting bitch face'. At almost 9 feet from head to toe, a face that suggests carnivore rather than herbivore, and eerie eyes that stare deep into the soul, Zeb cuts an intimidating figure even among his fellow Jamoura.

Character Concept
In a different world and a different time, Zeb would be called a hipster, a rebellious youth too self-involved to listen. He's part of a demographic of new generation Jamoura who reject the conventional wisdom preached by their elders, and seeking their own path within the harsh, hostile world. According to him, perpetual smoking of various intoxicants during his formative years have given him a 'chill' and laidback disposition, and he often comes across as lazy and languid.

Having said that, Zeb's more Jamoura than he'll like to admit. He's no true pacifist, but he'll never start a fight - but he will finish one with extreme prejudice when sufficiently provoked. And underneath his stoner's facade, he possesses the Jamoura drive to learn and perfect, seeking tempered strength in body, mind, and soul. He's an enthusiast of the martial, seeks knowledge of both arcane and the world, and has zero tolerance for the nastier vulgarities of the 'primitives'.

Character History
Forthcoming

Language

Fluent Language: Common
Basic Language: Jamourian
Poor Language: Vani

Possessions N/A

Heirloom:

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM
Cash In Housing +500 GM 600 GM
Broad-brim hat -4 GM 596 GM


Last edited by Zeb on December 19th, 2015, 6:10 am, edited 6 times in total.
Zeb
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Zeb

Postby Zeb on December 19th, 2015, 5:12 am

Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Acrobatics 10 SP 10 Novice
Body Building 10 SP 10 Novice
Intimidation 10 SP 10 Novice
Persuasion 10 SP 10 Novice
Unarmed Combat 10 SP 10 Novice
Wilderness Survival 10 RB 10 Novice
Last edited by Zeb on December 20th, 2015, 12:23 pm, edited 6 times in total.
Zeb
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Zeb

Postby Zeb on December 19th, 2015, 5:16 am

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Zeb

Postby Astator on January 4th, 2016, 5:36 pm

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Hello there, there are some major issues that need to be addressed before you can continue role playing. Don't worry it won't take long.

  • You need to list a birthdate. Plain and simple. Remember a date in Mizahar is one of the four seasons: Spring, Summer, Fall, Winter. A day falling between 1 and 91 (92 for Winter), and your age subtracted from the year (If you were born in Summer and the current season was Spring, subtract 1 as Summer wouldn't be around).
  • How did this Jamouran get from the Spires to Nyka and Survive?
  • How did this Jamouran learn Vani?
  • Are you sure you do not want the Heirloom or the Possessions?
  • You must state what environment you can survive in.
  • You must list all threads you are apart of (minus Registries and obviously gate threads)
  • The max height of a male Jamoura is only 8 feet, please fix this.
  • Homelessness is not allowed in Nyka, please state where you live and if you have been around since the Fall of 515 actively you must remember to pay the living expenses for that season plus any housing fees due to renting (as you have cashed in your housing.

Once you have fixed these issues, please PM me via the little envelope to the left.

Thank you,
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