Edaire Yaelson

[Edaire]

Edaire Yaelson Appearance Race: Human Gender: -Checks pants-, Yup,Male Age: Early Twenties,22 years old. Birthday: 24, Winter, 494 Birthplace: Sunberth Appearance: Edaire stands 6.1, A tall broad man, with a heavy torso, and arms built for cleaving through stone with a pickaxe, He usually seen with a pipe in his mouth, and an uneasy glint in his eyes. His stare is almost melancholic , and he wears a wooden idol of a sword around his neck, like a necklace . He has a short beard, and his hair is straw blond as well. Character Concept Edaire is Melancholic, liking reason over emotion. On the outside hes a cold, heartless man, with nothing but purpose in his eyes, demolished of any feeling. He can even just stare people down,not talking for minuets , then finally speaking after he has thought about his response, Most people view him as odd, or creepy. But on the inside of you stick with him, you have an optimistic thrill seeker, who loves to challenge his limits. Character History Edaire grew up in Sunberth, son of an descendant of a large mining family, along with his mother who was a caring old companion of the man. Edaire grew up with a brother, Lyonce, Life was hard for Edaire and Lyonce, they grew up in the slums of Sunberth, they didn't have much food, gold, or anything really. So Edaire and Lyonce promised to their parents, somehow they would find a happy ending before their death. In Edaire's youth he was playful, thrill seeking, and optimistic . He loved being the ladies man, and was always seeking something more. Edaire and Lyonce grew up to 15, with Lyonce being the older brother at 17. Lyonce was a brutal man, who enjoyed the pain and suffering of others, but despite this Edaire and Lyonce had an unbreakable bond. They would not seperate, they always fought together, they always drank ,ate, and walked together. Some considered them homosexual, of which of Sunberth nature, they were beaten by Lyonce and Edaire, Lyonce got his first spear at the age of 19, where he had worked to get the money by serving at the Drunken fish. After that, he joined the Sun's Birth, in hopes of gaining more wealth, While Edaire moved towards the Drunken fish to gain more money in hopes of the same goal. One day, a fight grew between Lyonce and his fellow Suns Birth warriors about ethics and values. It got so heated that weapons were drawn ,and Lyonce was killed 10 to 1, although Lyonce went out with a fight, taking down 5 of the 10 men. Edaire, stricken with grief, quit his job at the Drunken Fish, and moved towards his parents home. He sat in his room, staring at his feet for three days. People thought he was dead, or missing..until he emerged out from that room, a new man. He spent his money, and bought a pickaxe. For 5 whole years, he trained. He spent all of his day training with a Kopesh , doing dirty work for gangs, being an overall sellsword, more focused on raising his skill then gold, although he did gain a large amount of money, around 500 coins of which he kept hidden under the floorboards at his home. On his fathers death bed, he pledged to make something of himself, to make the world know his name..he wanted to be a hero, one way or another, just to make his father proud. His father smiled, his last words being "Knock'em dead kid..." Edaire's mother died soon after of old age. And Edaire starts his journey, a new man. Language Fluent Language: Common Basic Language: None Poor Language: None Skills Skill EXP Total Proficiency Weapon- Kopesh, 15 SP 15 Novice Weapon/Shield-Buckler 20 SP 20 Novice Endurance, 15 RB, 10 SP 25 Novice Lores Edaire has lore of Kopesh: Offensive stance. Edaire also has lore of Sunberth navigation, IE streets, slums, shortcuts, ect. Possessions 1 Set of Clothing -Simple Shirt -Simple Pants -Simple Undergarments -Simple Cloak -Simple Boots 1 Waterskin 1 Backpack which contains: -Comb (Wood) -Brush (Wood) -Soap -Razor -Balanced Rations (1 Week's worth) -1 eating knife -Flint & Steel -Brigandine-Formfit -Buckler -Heirloom Kopesh -Wooden idol necklace 285 Gold Mizas Heirloom: Kopesh Housing Location: Sunberth House: Edaire, lives in The Druken Fish , in Sunberth, in hope of more wealth , (I just took 500 coins n' all) Ledger Purchase Cost Total Starting House Cashed in 600 GM Thread List Link your current & past threads here!

[Edaire]

Edits in progress.

[Royal]

MODERATOR INTERVENTION

Hi Edaire,

Thanks for making some changes to your CS. It has indeed improved but there are a few final issues that need to be dealt with:

• Inventory: Currently, at the bottom of your inventory, is listed '285 Gold Mizas'. I'm guessing you mean this to be the 600GM that later appears in your ledger. Could you correct this, please?
• Ledger: You still haven't taken off the price for the wooden idol necklace (which appears in your inventory) or the pickaxe you mention in the history.
• Lores: Your lores still need tweaking. Instead of 'Edaire has lore of Kopesh: Offensive stance', they need to be worded as: 'Lore: Offensive Stance' and likewise for 'Edaire also has lore of Sunberth navigation, IE streets, slums, shortcuts, ect.', which needs to be 'Lore of Sunberth Layout'.

Once you’ve made these alterations, let me know. Also, if you’ve got any questions about Sunberth, or are unsure how the city functions, please let me know. I’m here to help!

-Royal