Solo Hunting and The Consequences

Ketrien decides to go out to hunt and finds himself at the wrong place at the wrong time.

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Built into the cliffs overlooking the Suvan Sea, Riverfall resides on the edge of grasslands of Cyphrus where the Bluevein River plunges off the plain and cascades down to the inland sea below. Home of the Akalak, Riverfall is a self-supporting city populated by devoted warriors. [Riverfall Codex]

Hunting and The Consequences

Postby Ketrien Ymiir on June 14th, 2013, 8:23 am

Summer Day 6: Dawn


The sun moves gracefully up into the sky, the morning dew making the scent of the surrounding area sweet and comforting. Looking back at Riverfall's gates and tall formidable walls sends a sense of ease through Ketrien, sighing peacefully he began moving again heading towards the far off patch of forest where he decided to hunt this day. His skinning knife lashed to his simple sash and his double bladed dagger strung to his hip for easy usage if the need arose. The path narrowed and became more worn with each passing step.

As he neared the tree line the sun was just above the trees and he closed his eyes calming his anxiousness at the thrill of today's hunt. Attuning his senses, Ket found himself drawn to the sounds of the woods, the flapping of wings and the other bustling residents. 'Oh yes, inhaling deeply 'It's going to be a good hunt today. he thought. Taking a slightly nervous look around with his acute eyesight and seeing no one, he began disrobing tucking his clothing and knifes into his small pack, next he undid his arm and foot wrappings also placing them inside. Removing his mother's pendant slowly and gliding his fingers softly over the etched engraving of the crouched tiger, whispering the saying his mother taught him before the hunt. "The forest is not your friend, neither is it your enemy, never take more than you need and always remember to give back." a small smile stretched across his face as he spoke softly to the amulet, "I will be safe mother." Kneeling, Ket then securely placed the pendant in his pack under all his items and closed it up. Ketrien then embraced the allure of the wild, feeling her warm embrace and shifted in to his Myrian Tiger form, picking up his pack in his powerful jaws and bounded off into the woods.

Ket searched with his eyes and especially his nose until he found what he was looking for, a tall tree with what seemed to be a foxhole long abandoned, where he could securely place his human gear. Gracefully bending down Ket tucked it away and marked the tree for an easy find later. The woods were teeming with life, as he stalked through the trees looking for prey.

Moving deeper into the forest a slight breeze rustled through his fur feeling cool on his skin under the thickness of his black striped orange-red fur, Ket finally narrowed in on the scent of a few deer one male and two female. Following intently Ket focused on the sweet smell of sweat and a few fresh droppings, he finally managed to track them to a small cropping of reasonably high grass.

Aware of their skittish nature, he circled slowly not only focused on his surroundings and his prey but also the direction of the wind. He crouched keeping his different colored eyes fastened on the grazing unaware deer. The wind shifted and Ketrien leapt taking the male under his weight, his powerful claws digging deep into the creatures sides. The deer bucked trying to gain its freedom to no avail. Ket used all of his weight and brought the male down and with lightning fast reflexes snapped his jaws around the creatures neck, the taste of its life's blood spilling into Ket's throat sent an exhilarating feeling through him as he crushed its neck. 'More' he thought roughly the free feeling of being outside, in the woods his home, invigorated him. The blood coursing through his very veins, propelled him to the next, time seemed to slow down for him. The first doe was already bounding towards the edge of the cropping and the second was still struggling to get up from its resting spot, he could hear her heart thudding with overwhelming fear.

Ket released the males body and darted for the struggling female, swiftly he was upon her, Ket's muscles tightened as he extended his razor sharp talons and swung missing her head by mere inches, overcompensating. Ket snarled in anger at his misfortune. The doe startled even more, found her feet and bolted for the treeline following the other. Thrilled and also angered by his mistake he took off after her evading trees as he sprinted, closing the distance quickly he leapt throwing his powerful build into the deer his claws ripping into her shoulders. With a little work Ket tackled her to the ground, using his weight to throw off her balance, his hind legs raking her sides and thigh muscles, his talons slicing deep into tendons with ease.

Ket stood the doe's bleats of panic and pain called out to him as he circled his dying prey 'Not a flawless kill, but sufficient' he thought, the smell of the carnage and spilled blood ravaged his senses and overcame him. With wild savagery like nothing he had felt before, he lunged taking her throat in his jaws and tore away the pitiful squeals of the dying creature. The sound of fleeting hooves echoed in his ears, craning his neck his breathing becoming heavy with excitement as the thrill of the hunt started taking over again, but Ket abandoned the last, for his mother's voice came to him through his over excitement. 'Take only that which you need and nothing more my son.'

Turning back toward his prizes, Ket licked at the blood pouring from his prey's death wounds and gorged himself on the parts of the deer he couldn't use back in Riverfall, and the parts he mangled. Tearing at the necks and undersides of the beasts, ripping at their innards; lungs, livers and intestines alike. After he had taken his fill, he stalked back to the tree where he stashed his gear and grabbed it. He ran fast darting through the trees left and right feeling the cool wind rush through his fur yet again, hurrying, for the scent of freshly spilled blood would attract other predators to his location. As he entered the small parting of trees he shifted back into his human form, life blood stained on his hands, face and chest. He knelt beside each and grabbed his skinning knife and began his work.

Ketrien Skinned the doe first, trying to salvage some of the creatures hide, he severed along the muscles slipping a few times. Ket steadied his breath and his hand adrenaline still pumping through him. By the time he finished Ket had carved more of the doe than skinned it, clumps of hacked off meat dangled from the hide, he rolled it up and reserved to cleaning it up more when time allotted. Standing he moved to the buck beginning again slowing down and calming himself, 'Steady, focus'. Ket slashed sections, hoping it to be easier to track. He slipped the knife between the muscle and hide slowly moving it across.

The adrenaline still ricocheted through his veins, his heart still pumping from excitement. His hand slipped again severing the hide, 'This is taking too long, I'm going to need advice if I can find someone to teach me.' he looked towards the sky and shook his head the sun was hours past the tree lines meaning night fast approached. He cut into the meat and rolled up the strips of hide and laid it skin side down on the ground and began hacking small bits of meat off throwing them on the skin.

Reaching into his bag and produced his sash tying it around the lips of the hide tightly, then he produced his clothing putting them on one by one arming himself again as an after thought, until all that remained was his necklace. 'Remember to thank your prey for nourishing your body' he spoke then the words of thanks, 'Remember to speak peace to the spirit of the prey you have hunted' Ket bowed his head and spoke the words of peace, 'And always remember to thank the forest and the earth for accepting and nurturing the spirit of a fallen brother.' Ketrien knelt kissing the ground thanking it like he was taught. Then he stood grabbing his pack and meat sack and started towards the edge of the forest back tracking his foot steps.
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Hunting and The Consequences

Postby Ketrien Ymiir on June 18th, 2013, 9:11 pm

Summer Day 6: Dusk


Night had fallen by the time Ketrien had emerged from the woods, the partially cool brisk air settled over his glistening skin, the high grass parted before him as he started the trek back to civilization. This realization saddened him a little, he enjoyed being out here, it was infinitely better than the confined and crowded space of a city. Granted it was marvelous in its grandeur, but it's beauty is cold and refined too much so for Ket's liking. He breathed in deeply letting the fresh air seep into him, the slight breeze carrying with it the scents of the surrounding areas, the wildflower in full bloom, the forests and its myriad of different scents and the stench of human filth. Ketrien's eyes widened in alarm.

'What's this? No, I'm too far from Riverfall!' As Ket turned he felt a sharp pain in his shoulder and cried out, the force of the blow taking him to the ground. Ketrien reached for his shoulder, his fingers brushed a thin wooden shaft. He staggered to his feet trying to keep low to the ground. He could here shouting and the sound of at least one barking hound, words were unclear for all he could hear was the heavy thudding of his own heart and the rushing of his blood through his veins. The arrow tucked deep into his left shoulder hindered his movements, making him a bit more sluggish than he'd like. He bit down grabbing his fallen meat sack and ran grimacing.

The steady sound of feet pounding the ground behind him broke his brief impairment, he dropped the sack and kept low drawing his double bladed dagger with his right hand. Before he had time to do much else a deep snarl ripped through the night air, a dark four legged beast hurtled itself into Ketrien's chest knocking him prone. Dust kicked up in plumes as the dogs reflexes kicked in rolling to its feet, it slowly started circling its sharp jagged teeth bared aggressively. Ket groaned and tried to get up, but the beast let out a savage bark and biting towards Ket's arms.

Something inside Ketrien tore away and he reacted bringing the dagger across the dogs snout, connecting, a stream of blood spurted across his chest. The dog whimpered and shook its head violently before resuming its attack. But Ketrien was already up crouched low, seething with anger he swung again the knife lopping off an ear. Ignoring the pain the dog swept low latching onto Ket's leg and pulled it out from under him, dropping him yet again to the ground with such force it knocked the dagger from his grip. Violently the beast released and pounced on his chest. With his left arm he held the dogs teeth from latching onto his neck, but the arrow in his shoulder slowly drained away his strength. Blindly he reached for the knife his fingers brushing the hilt, the dog redoubled its resolve and inched closer. Ketrien could feel the beasts hot breath on his neck as its saliva ran slowly dowm his arm.

With a wicked snarl he gritted his teeth and closed his fist slamming it into the dogs jaw stunning it for just enough time to grab the dagger and shove it deep into the beasts chest, then into its side luckily slipping past its ribcage and straight into its lung. Its eyes widened then collapsed, death claiming it. Rolling the dog off of him, Ket struggled to his feet. The pain was excruciating.

'I have to make it back to Riverfall.' He thought weakly. 'As much as I'd like too, this is a fight for another day.' Wincing he sheathed his dagger and grabbed the meat sack, staying low Ketrien ran towards Riverfall. He could still hear his pursuers following, his chest was on fire, it was getting harder and harder to maintain this pace. 'I have to keep moving, or I am done!'

He slowed for a minute, gauging his position and distance from Riverfall. After a brief rest he continued on, his bones ached, his muscles sore and his wounds bled, but all he could think about, all he could feel was that overwhelming sensation he felt tugging at him, beckoning him on. Steeling himself he pushed on 'I will not become somethings prey! I will survive and overcome!' Ket focused repeating it over and over in his mind.

"Sirrah? What has happened?" Ket pulled himself from his focus startled by the sudden booming voice.
"What?" he called back weakly, nearly collapsing from weakness. He stared dumbfounded at the formidable walls of Riverfall and couldn't help but smirk. Walking slowly forward Ket showed his visitor's papers to the guards and told him about his encounter. Nodding the guard barked an order in a language he didn't understand to his watch partner.

"Night is dangerous! You are lucky." the guard said in thickly accented common. He nodded towards the now opening gates. Ket realized for the first time then, that the sun was just creeping up over the treeline and that he still held his earnings from the hunt. Smiling softly Ketrien nodded in agreement and stumbled on into the city.

The gates closed behind him and everything he had left evaporated as they did, collapsing to the ground Ketrien's breathing became heavy and his vision began to blur. "Sirrah? Sirrah? Are you well?" a soft almost musical voice asked. The last thing Ketrien saw before blacking out was a pale skinned women with flowing pale hair.
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Hunting and The Consequences

Postby Magpie on June 25th, 2013, 8:01 pm

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Ketrien :
XP:
Observation +2
Tracking +1
Hunting +1
Tanning +1
Weapon: Dagger +1

Lores:
The Forest is Not Your Enemy
Remembering Mother's Lessons
Take Only What You Need
Thank Your Prey for Nourishing You
Riverfall: Grand but Crowded
When Pursued, Keep Moving or Die

Injuries:
Arrow wound in shoulder (14 days to heal)

Ledger:
10lbs of deer meat


Notes :
You mentioned in your grade request that you were looking for suggestions for improvements. What you have is pretty good, though you have some trouble with commas, primarily in leaving them out when they're needed. One note I did see in term of realism is that deer are much, much fast than you give them credit for here. Don't get me wrong, a tiger can easily catch a deer, but when the jig is up, those other two deer are long gone by the time the first one is dead.

Additionally, you may want to break up such long posts into multiple posts in the future. This isn't that big a problem, just that experience points are awarded on a per-post basis, so I could only give you 2 points max for anything in this thread.

Lastly, please use a different color than the dark blue you're using for other men speaking; against the brown of the site's background, it's difficult to read.


If you have any questions or concerns about what was awarded, please don't hesitate to PM me.
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