New charicter

[Alex Airay]

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name: Alex Airay
Race: Inarta
Gender: male
Age:21
Birth day : 7/10/1992
City: Denval, kalea
Birth place: Lhavit, kalea
Appearance: i am 5,11 137lbs with blue hair. i have many scars. my eyes are green. my skin tone is white.

Bio: i am a thief and i work alone but i cant look away from someone who needs help. i hate being in debt to some one and will try to get out of it as fast as i can. i drink alcohol but not all the time but when i do i drink alot. i am a big flirt but i can be serious when i need to be but most of the time i am goofing off.

history: my life when i was young was hard i cam from poverty i had no parents i learned to live on my own and get what i need i came to denval from lhavit on a trade wagon. i have been living here for 2 years now.

Fluent Language: common

Skills
Skill Total Proficiency
Stealth 63 Expert
Begging 87 Master
Traping 35 Competent

Possessions
1 Set of Clothing
-Flaxen Shirt
-Flaxen Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Flaxen Cloak or Coat
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Wood)
-Brush (Wood)
-Soap
-Razor
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: necklace that is sliver and studded gold and a ruby in the center

Housing
Location: Denval, Kalea
house: starting house

[Harrier]

Hello adventurer, I'm Harrier, one of the Wind Reach AS's and I've been looking through your character sheet and noticed a few issues.

• Your CS needs to be titled as the name of your PC.
• If your PC was born outside of WR, they are in all liklihood not full blooded Inarta. You will need to specify who his parents were in some way since most Inarta life in Wind Reach, not Lhavit.
• Your age is wrong. Mizahar does not follow Earth time in the slightest. Please refer to Time for detailed information regarding timestamping and and the current year and season (which is Fall 513 by the way).
• You cannot live in Denval as the city was destroyed in 512AV.
• Inarta do not have blue hair.
• You're allowed up to 3 languages based on your characters knowledge and race (One fluent, one basic, and one poor).
• There are no roads in Kalea, therefore trade caravans must go by sea.
• No PC may start with more than 30 starting points in any skill and they cannot have more than 60 points in total (including the 10RB Inarta receive, as noted in the Starting package and race lore).
• Your heirloom costs too much.
• I would encourage using proper grammar, capitalization, punctuation and spelling.
  
  Here is a list of links you need to read carefully and fully familiarize yourself with (many of which were linked to you via the welcome PM you received upon joining):
  
  Valterrian
  Djed Storm of 512
  Starting Guide
  Starting Package
  Inarta
  Lhavit
  Price List
  Skill List
  Rules

Once you've fixed these issues, I'll remove the intervention. If you have any questions about the above, feel free to PM me and I'll be happy to assist!

Fly On ~Harrier

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(c) Phoenix