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[Crosspatch]

Hello there!

I'm Crosspatch, one of the friendly CS Liaisons on Mizahar! I've been looking over your Character Sheet, and I have noticed some minor issues that need to be resolved and fixed. Sadly these need to be done before you can continue roleplaying, so let's take a look at them shall we?

• At creation skills are required to have between 5 and 30 skill points in them including the racial bonus. Please move 10 of your SP points from your malediction skill.
• Due to being Novice in Wilderness Survival can you please clearly state somewhere the one environment type your PC is familiar with? (Example types include: Desert, Forest, Hills, Marsh, Mountains, Plains, Sea or Underground).
• Your lore "Lore of Proper Horse Care" is too broad, more so as there is the skills Animal Husbandry and Horsemanship. A lore is some form of general knowledge that the character has gained over their lifetime. Such as knowledge on a particular deity or knowing the layout of a particular city.
• Please choose a cloak or coat. You cannot have both.
• Walking 40 days in the wilderness with no formal hunting skills, or ways to defend yourself whilst just being a Novice in Wilderness Survival is very unlikely - even more so as a child. The Wild lands of Mizahar are a very dangerous place. Please take this into consideration.
• In terms of the hamlet and the Sorceress in the Cabin, there are no small towns, villages or settlements outside of the main cities in Mizahar - anything outside of those cities is in danger of being destroyed by predators, monsters, bandits, slavers, and the land itself. If there was, they'd be killed very quickly. Please take this into consideration with both your history and your character's concept, I recommend you read the Things you need to Know lore page as well.
• Where did all these attacks occur? What city did they start in? What region even? The readers will want to know these things.
• At creation you can have the option to pick one basic and one poor language if you desire, are you sure you do not want this?

Once these problems have been dealt with, drop me a PM and I'll remove this intervention and approve your CS for you. Also if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask and I'll do my best to answer!


Crosspatch