[Issues found by Gossamer] Raguna

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Raguna

Postby Raguna on September 7th, 2015, 5:13 pm

RAGUNA
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Name: Raguna
Race: Kelvic
Gender: Male
Age: 2
Birthdate: Spring 14, 513

The only real trait a normal person could recognize are his eyes. A deep, flawless onyx pool of something more serious than he was ever willing to indulge. They would dart quickly, yet smoothly over your face, arms, clothing, hair, hands, quietly taking everything in while his simple mouth would speak at you. He has a bird's eye, extremely adapt at taking in details up close, and distinguishing accurately from a distance. Yet your eyes never seem to look too intensely into his. Instead they would drift elsewhere. To his hair, dark, plump, and full, but just as wild as expected for someone his age. If you are lucky you might even catch a twig or two rooted far inside. Or to his jaw, that looked permanently swollen, yet somehow that look fit him, made him look older than he actually was, it gave him a bit of maturity where none else could be found.

Following his short neck the rest of his hardened body came. He has a stocky build that makes him look shorter than he truly is. When in fact he is just as tall, and sometimes taller than the condensed Inartians he spent most of his time around. His arms are the largest of his muscles, his shoulders round and sending cascades of muscle to his forearms. The constant beating of wings that flying demanded did a great deal to his physique. His legs were next, employed mainly in tightly gripping wriggling prey, it came down to live or die, and so his legs are fully equipped for the challenge. Finally his torso is in moderate shape, enough muscle surrounds his rib cage to fill out the rest of his body to proportion. However he also made sure to store enough fat to live outside during the harsh Winters with only his feathers to help with warmth.

Finally his dark hair changed to form black streaks in his feathers. The rest of his plumage was a deep golden brown. His arms turned into huge, powerful wings that were more than double his small birds body in length. His legs transformed into small sticks capable of gripping pounds of live animal, restricting it from escape. These legs were equipped with shiny talons as sharp as knives. His simple mouth instead became a sharp grey beak with the ability to snap bone in an instant. Although, overall, his body was much smaller in comparison to his human form, but many times more dangerous.

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Hobby Falcon
Falco subbuteo
Sexually Mature
Length: 13 inches
Weight: 240 grams
Wingspan: 30 inches
Abilities: Strong eyesight. Very detailed near, very clear far.
Last edited by Raguna on September 8th, 2015, 5:55 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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Raguna
Hobby Falcon Kelvic
 
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Location: Wind Reach, Kalea
Race: Kelvic
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Raguna

Postby Raguna on September 7th, 2015, 6:12 pm

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HISTORY
Birth - Fall 515 AV


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PRESENT
Fall 515 AV

City: Wind Reach

Raguna spends most of his time either within the city of Wind Reach talking to its inhabitants. Or just outside of the volcano in the surrounding forest where he dwells and hunts in Falcon Form.
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Raguna
Hobby Falcon Kelvic
 
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Raguna

Postby Raguna on September 8th, 2015, 2:33 am

Relationships

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Family :


Friends :


Enemies :


Acquaintances :


Companions :
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Raguna
Hobby Falcon Kelvic
 
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Race: Kelvic
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Raguna

Postby Raguna on September 8th, 2015, 3:40 am

Belongings

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Home

Raguna's nest is a hand-me-down Eagle nest that he carefully restored from neglect about a season ago. So far this home is his favorite when compared to the others he has had over the years. The huge nest made of large twigs and small branches was supplied with dried moss, pine needles and fur from previous prey to make it warm and comforting for his small falcon form. The nest is also nicely located more than fifty feet above the ground in the dying branches of a very old tree that is somehow still clinging to the side of the Wind Reach volcano. At it's base the trunk of the tree, now scrapped free of bark and grey, is a hole in the trunk and the soil probably made by large rodents, or small wild dogs for shelter. Now it is used as a hiding place for Raguna's great chest of all his humanly belongings.
Items


Clothing
  • Linen Undergarments
  • Linen Trousers
  • Linen Shirt
  • Linen Jacket
  • Low Leather Boots


Survival
  • Waterskin
  • Flint & Steel
  • Eating Knife
  • Toolkit, Hunter/Trapper's (Heirloom)


Containers
  • Rucksack
  • High Quality Cedar Great Chest


Miscellaneous
  • Glass Comb
  • Razor
  • Wrapped Soap


Containers


Great Chest
  • Pinions
  • Undergarments
  • Linen Trousers
  • Linen Shirt
  • Linen Jacket
  • Low Leather Boots
  • Rucksack
  • Waterskin
  • Flint & Steel
  • Eating Knife
  • Glass Comb
  • Razor
  • Wrapped Soap
  • Toolkit, Hunter/Trapper's


Rucksack
  • Pinions
  • Waterskin
  • Flint & Steel
  • Eating Knife
IF BATHING
  • Undergarments
  • Linen Trousers
  • Linen Shirt
  • Linen Jacket
  • Low Leather Boots
  • Glass Comb
  • Razor
  • Wrapped Soap


Toolkit, Hunter/Trapper's
  • Hunting Knife
  • Roll of Thin Rope (used for making simple traps)
  • 5 Common Animal Scents
  • Preserving Kit
  • 2 Tiny Animal Snares
  • Small Animal Snare
  • 10 Square Foot Camouflage Tarp
Last edited by Raguna on September 12th, 2015, 4:24 pm, edited 8 times in total.
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Raguna
Hobby Falcon Kelvic
 
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Race: Kelvic
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Raguna

Postby Raguna on September 8th, 2015, 1:02 pm

Ledger

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Item Mizas Total
Starting 100 pinions 100 pinions
Housing 500 pinions 600 pinions
High Quality Great Chest -6 pinions 594 pinions


In Thread Purchases/Earnings

Item Thread
Last edited by Raguna on September 11th, 2015, 2:31 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Raguna
Hobby Falcon Kelvic
 
Posts: 15
Words: 7575
Joined roleplay: September 6th, 2015, 3:33 am
Location: Wind Reach, Kalea
Race: Kelvic
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Raguna

Postby Raguna on September 8th, 2015, 5:17 pm

Knowledge

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Languages

Fluent: Nari
Basic: Ancient Tongue
Poor: Common


Skills

Skill Breakdown Total Mastery
Auristics 20SP 20 Novice
Hunting 10RB 10 Novice
Intelligence 10SP 10 Novice
Wilderness Survival (Forest) 20SP 20 Novice


Raguna sometimes has physical reactions to skills that would otherwise seem invisible when preformed, or skills that require some explanation on how Raguna came learned them. These notes will be explained here:

Ancient Tongue: Raguna learned the basics of and dead language from the keeper of the gates of Wind Reach. He spent a lot of time around the old man as a young bird and the keeper enjoyed sharing his interest in the tongue.

Auristics: When using Auristics there is very little outside reaction. Only few people paying extreme attention would even notice the little detail, and doubtfully be able to connect this with his magic use. At the very instant when he 'turns on' Auristics, his eyes dilate to their fullest extent, just for an instant, before returning to normal.
Raguna came to learn this skill from observing a human travelling through Kalea, just outside Wind Reach in the Spring of 514. Raguna accompanied the man for a few weeks of his travel where he noticed that the traveler knew much about his surroundings even though he had never been through Kalea before. The nomad explained Auristics to him, and how it worked. He also taught him how to begin to use it, before leaving the rest up to Raguna to practice.

Lores

Intelligence in Observation and Analysis
Intelligence in Rumors and Hearsay
Last edited by Raguna on September 11th, 2015, 12:53 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Raguna
Hobby Falcon Kelvic
 
Posts: 15
Words: 7575
Joined roleplay: September 6th, 2015, 3:33 am
Location: Wind Reach, Kalea
Race: Kelvic
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Raguna

Postby Crosspatch on September 11th, 2015, 9:44 am

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Hello there!

I'm Crosspatch, one of the friendly CS Liaisons on Mizahar! I've been looking over your Character Sheet, and I have noticed some minor issues that need to be resolved and fixed. Sadly these need to be done before you can continue roleplaying, so let's take a look at them shall we?

  • How does your character know the dead language ancient tongue? How does your character know Auristics? Who taught them? Can you please explain how the character has come across learning this in your history.
  • May I advise you put a concept/personality section in your character sheet - that way people will have a clearer idea of what his likes, dislikes, ethics, morals and behaviour is.
  • Due to being Novice in Wilderness Survival can you please clearly state somewhere the one environment type your PC is familiar with? (Example types include: Desert, Forest, Hills, Marsh, Mountains, Plains, Sea or Underground).
  • I have noticed you have several items in your possessions that you have not deducted the value of from your ledger. These items are as follows; High Quality chest, An average lock and an average key.
  • You appear to be missing an Heirloom. An Heirloom can be any one item as long as it is under the value of 50gm, is meaningful to the character and is not magical in any shape or form.

Once these problems have been dealt with, drop me a PM and I'll remove this intervention and approve your CS for you. Also if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask and I'll do my best to answer!


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Postby Gossamer on September 12th, 2015, 6:33 pm

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