[Issues found by Astator] Dameon Shikyo

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Dameon Shikyo

Postby Dameon on May 8th, 2016, 10:06 am

Dameon Shikyo
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Appearance

Race: Human
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Birthday: 30, Winter, 497.
Birthplace: Lhavit

Appearance:

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Dameon is of average height and weight sitting at roughly 5ft10in tall and weighing 155lbs. What weight he does have is in his muscles as he has nearly no body fat. Dameon has black hair and surprisingly blue eyes which contrasts with his hair color and his pale white skin. He often prefers to mask his appearance hiding it behind cloaks and light attire so that he can easily slip in and out of a crowd without anyone remembering what he looks like. Dameon has survived by living on the streets and stealing if need be so he is used to dressing and disguising himself like a commoner. His cloaks and choice of attire tend to have blue in them as it is his favorite color.



Character Concept

Dameon is if anything a survivor. Since a young age Dameon has been living off of the streets having to do whatever he needed to in order to survive. Even though his actions were less than reputable to most he was seen as a sort of figure of light to those he knew well enough and to those who were in greater need than himself. True he was cold and calculating at times but this was only when it was imperative that he needed to be. Other times he was warm and compassionate often giving up things he had stolen in order to provide for others less fortunate than himself. He never could seem to get a grip on his life even as he struggled with how to survive from one day to the next. Eventually he would teach himself how to wield his blade passed down to him and get even more skilled at stealing. Even amidst his life as a thief he always wished and longed for something more. Dameon doesn’t know much about the city that he lives in other than from what lore he has read as his parents were killed at a young age leaving nothing but a dagger to his name and the rest to fight for till he was what he is today. Dameon wishes for opportunities at something more than living like a street rat and would do anything to obtain that goal. After all Dameon is a survivor and willing to do whatever it takes to move forward and obtain whatever he needs to, to further his future and extend his life. Though at times his warm and compassionate side has proven to be both a strength and a weakness he still feels obligated to help others succeed where he had nobody to rely on. A beacon of light while he prowls the night but even the smallest of lights can brighten a room.

Character History

Dameon was born during his families travels to Lhavit in their effort to settle down away from their prior city. Though they would arrive safely to Lhavit after leaving with numerous other people they would find it hard to adapt to the new culture and society. Though both his both his mother (an Inarta) and father (Human) would find a decent job within the city his family seemed to be unable to afford to keep Dameon around. They would struggle on, his father often giving up meals so Dameon could eat but eventually his father would become sick and by the time Dameon turned five would pass away in his sleep. His mother grief stricken and unable to afford their house any longer would go back to selling her body and eventually would be killed in an altercation with a client of hers. All of this would happen by the time Dameon had turned ten years of age. Now alone and having to fend for himself Dameon would work together with other young and orphaned children to try and keep surviving by stealing whatever they needed to survive.

Dameon would eventually become very good at stealing and even learn to pick locks. Along with his size it seemed that thieving was the best source of income he could obtain. During this process and as he grew older with those around him he would eventually be able to practice and learn how to use his dagger even if it was only barely with any skill he still found it was better than anyone he happened to try and come across. He would stick with enhancing his skills at larceny to be able to be able to get away with potentially more and more money. Though often in his success he would see others not nearly as fortunate and share his offerings with the ones he had grown up with on the streets. As he got into his mid-teens Dameon had developed a knack for deception and added that to his list of skills. He realized when it came to stealing often his words were his weapons. He was able to fool people into leaving a place unlocked and unsecure or even conning them into giving him money.

One such case of this happened when Dameon had turned eighteen. He had located one of the gem crafters in the city and tailed him to his home in an effort to see just how vulnerable his place would be. After finally seeing the man’s home he knew for a fact that he would be unable to simply pick his way in and often the man kept a guard outside. However Dameon was still determined to make this man his next victim so he continued to follow the man out of sight and paid close attention to everything he did and even tested ways to make the man leave his home. This process would continue for nearly two months before Dameon would set his plan into motion. Dameon would have his friends attack the store and cause a small riot and lead the man to believe his store was being broken into. In the meantime Dameon would frantically knock on the man’s door telling him that armed men were pillaging his store. The man in such a hurry would take his guard and leave his house unsecured allowing Dameon to sneak in and steal roughly a hundred Kina from the man before he left. It wasn’t long after this major success Dameon had been paid a visit by an unlikely man appraising his skill in deceit and manipulation telling him that he may have a bright future ahead of him. Dameon would thank the man but politely refuse to know what he was talking about as to not potentially incriminate himself and would then be on his way.


Language

Fluent Language: Common
Basic Language: Nari
Poor Language: Pavi


Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Dagger 15 SP 15 Novice
Acrobatics 8 SP 8 Novice
Endurance 6 SP 6 Novice
Stealth 10 SP 10 Novice
Larceny 15 RB, 11 SP 26 Competent


Lores

Helpful Lores:
Lore of Lhavit Streetplan
Lore of Lhavitian Culture

Possessions

Starting Items:
-Simple Shirt
-Simple Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Simple Cloak
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Bone)
-Brush (Bone)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel

Purchased:
-Thieves Tools
-Mask
-Wrist Knife (Wrist under bracer)
-Leather Armor
-Acid (1 vial)
-Glass cutter
-Sword Catcher

Heirloom:

Shikyo Jambiya: A finely made Jambiya handed down from his father. It is a little larger than others but shorter than a short sword and has a black leather handle and a black iron pommel included is a black sheath and strap.

Housing

Location: [Lhavit] Solar Wind Apartments

House: Located on the outskirts of the Surya Plaza on Zintia Peak, the Solar Wind Apartments (or simply the Solar Winds) were built to accommodate the growing population after the first influx of visitors. It has grown since the first days it was built, nearly a century ago, and most of it's residents enjoy the close proximity to the plaza. Each room contains furniture based on the resident's lease, going from average up to a suite similar to that of the Shooting Star Inn. The usual furnishings include a canopy bed, a wooden desk, a soft, rounded chair, a hearth and couch. Various plants and pictures adorn the walls, but all residents have leeway to hang what they wish depending on their tastes.

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 Kina 100 Kina
Initial Items -66 Kina 6TK 33 K, 4TK

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Dameon Shikyo

Postby Astator on May 21st, 2016, 9:08 pm

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Welcome to Mizahar! A few issues have arisen during the reviewing of your character sheet that must be addressed. As this is an intervention you must cease all In Character posting until the intervention has been lifted. So let’s get started!

  • Your NAME violates the naming conventions of Mizahar. It is a derivation of the word Demon of which we do not have any of in this game. Please change.
  • In your concept you wrote:
    Dameon has survived by living on the streets and stealing if need be so he is used to dressing and disguising himself like a commoner…
    No. Lhavit does not allow for homelessness which this sentence applies.
  • As your mother as an Inarta you would be a Human, Mixed. Please change this in your Profile, your Character Sheet, and your Racial Bonus limit.
  • The whole last paragraph of your character’s history makes zero sense. Not because it is a huge block of text (which doesn’t help) but your skills doesn’t allow for such a feat to be possible. Deception? You lack several skills needed to even be remotely deceptive. Please change this. Also, something like this would have to be passed through the story teller of Lhavit.
  • How did you come by learning Pavi and Nari? Nari I can see, but it doesn’t state anywhere his family taught him and Pavi is Drykas language from a cultural standpoint and neither of your parents were Drykas. And the Drykas wouldn’t teach their language to outsiders.
  • Your weapon skill should be Weapon: Dagger or Weapon(Dagger) not just Dagger
  • Your heirloom is only ONE item below 50 gold mizas. As I have not seen something called a Shikyo Jambiya… Please provide me with a rough equivalency from the Price List.
  • Please list all the belongings found in your apartment.
  • In your ledger please list all purchased items. You cannot lump them into one lump sum.
Once you have completed what I have asked, please private message me via the little envelope to the left underneath my name and letting me know.

Thank you,
Astator
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