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Built into the cliffs overlooking the Suvan Sea, Riverfall resides on the edge of grasslands of Cyphrus where the Bluevein River plunges off the plain and cascades down to the inland sea below. Home of the Akalak, Riverfall is a self-supporting city populated by devoted warriors. [Riverfall Codex]

Fight or Flight (Nicodemus)

Postby Martini Elwood on August 1st, 2018, 11:22 pm

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Martini knew she had been crazy to trust a stranger. Crazy to think that he would somehow help her as they had split, with him running and her acting as bait. Despite that she had put her trust in him... []And it might have just killed her[/I]. She was seeing stars from just one hit, and it felt like all the air had been sucked from her lungs as she wheezed. She looked up, her vision blurred from the snarl that had left the feline creature attacking the monster.

Great, now she had to outrun a cougar? She was in tears again, but she knew she needed to move, to run as fast as she could towards the city... And as she stood on shaking, beaten legs that what she hopped to do. The cougar seemed to have little interest in her - she would need to use that. It attacked from a short distance away, keeping the monster from getting closer.

She would use that as her chance. She was quick to find her courage to run away when things got tough, just like she had all her life. And as she ran she cried, fearing for her life and hating the pain in her side as she moved. The city wasn't too far, but it would be a good distance.

Once she closed in on the gates she practically screamed in relief - her tired body slipping into unconsciousness as the guards made their way to her - she saw no sign of the man from earlier, no sign that he had been here or that he'd sent for help... And with that truth set in her mind she let herself slip completely into a dreamless state.

OOCSorry this is short, I tried to wrap up my half because I didn't want to drag this out. Let me know if you need anything changed.
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Fight or Flight (Nicodemus)

Postby Orakan on February 20th, 2019, 4:35 am

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Skills
● Intimidation - 1XP
● Planning - 1XP
● Observation - 4XP
● Brawling - 1XP
● Running - 4XP
● Socialisation - 2XP
● Endurance - 2XP
● Intelligence - 1XP
● Tactics - 1XP
● Leadership - 1XP
● Weapon: Dagger - 1XP

Lores
● The delightful feel of cool grass under hot feet
● Intimidation: Using facial expressions to appear tougher
● Planning: Bringing a weapon to explore the wilds
● Brawling: Using anything nearby as a projectile
● Leadership: Delegating under pressure
● Endurance: Using adrenaline to carry you through

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Just a heads up, be careful when using monsters, such as Yukmen, in threads in the future. Although you portrayed it accurately (description-wise), it is uncommon for only one to spawn. They spawn in swarms and it's highly unlikely either of you would have survived a true group of them. I understand wanting to shake things up and make use of the lore, though, but just be a bit more cautious in the future. When in doubt, check in with your ST to see if it's feasible to make use of certain monsters/beasts in a thread.

Nicodemus, feel free to give me a nudge if you return. Do let me know if you have any questions or concerns regarding your grade and don't forget to delete/edit your request in the grading queue. Cheers!
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