Kuragari - First Thread

[Kuragari]

Kuragari woke up feeling sore as always from all the errands he had to run during the week. He could completely recover all injuries and fatigue with a good night’s sleep. However that didn’t do anything for the soreness. Probably a reminder of what happened the day before, lest the memories fade into a dream. He smiles as he began to get dressed. If being in reimancer didn't work out, maybe he could write poetry. He left his bag in his room and locked the door behind him. He had a lot to do today, and not much time to do it.

Kuragari walked out into the bright sunny day with a smile on his face and a slight skip in his step. He had been working on furthering his res manipulation as of late and he felt so close to gaining access to a third element. As his mentor had said, he earned it. The thought troubled Kuragari though, causing him to stop next to the 'Under the Sun Magic Shop'. He wanted to buy some equipment, but he realized that he didn’t have the money to buy anything expensive. He had been here before, and almost always left empty handed.

He glanced around, almost expecting to be spotted or snooped on by a merchant. He quickly shook his head and entered the shop. He emerged several minutes later without purchasing anything. No, today he would be using a collection of notes that his friend had lent him regarding the various forms of personal magic. These would hopefully help him learn a little more about magic in his spare time. He would need every bit of help for his profession. He was also hoping to get into magical combat at some point in the future and this book was sure to help.

Kuragari himself had casted magic on others during short brawls and had witnessed first hand the damage that reimancy was capable of inflicting. He certainly wanted to be able to defend himself if he was put in such a scenario! It would be best that he have such protection himself, at least until he got stronger. He put the small book in his bag with the others, heading for his usual training area. He usually trained there with his aforementioned friend, Lini, although today he was hoping to train alone.

[Nightmare]

Intervention

Hello!

Welcome to Mizahar.

You are new, so mistakes like the above are expected. I am here to help you out and figure out what is acceptable and what isn't in Syliras.

So, first off. What you have written so far isn't bad at all. The quality is decent. But there are some minor discrepancies. As far as locations go, if the location isn't written up and put into this list then it doesn't exist. So the "Under the Sun Magic Shop" doesn't exist because it hasn't be written up and approved by me.

Secondly, who is your mentor? Is he or she the person who taught your character magic? If that is the case then you are going to need to apply to get him approved as an NPC by using these procedures. for personal NPCs or these for City NPCs. This applies to your character's friend Lini.

Thirdly, Magic. In Mizahar magic is... frightening to the average person. In Syliras, the common folk view it very dangerous for anyone who isn't a mage knight. So, if any were to see your character use magic, especially the dangerous forms of Reimancy, well... They are likely to attack the mage or call up the knights and have them take them off to be met with justice. They aren't likely to let people cast spells over them in or out of brawls, and if he were to harm another, he could be liable for execution or a long season of hard labor.

If you wanted to do magic, my suggestion is to consider joining the knighthood. There is no penalty for squires practicing magic and it is in fact encouraged. For common folk... not so much.

In general, I suggest you read up on Syliras, The Knights and generally read up more on what Mizahar is all about. Ask questions, I am more then willing to answer them.

However, until you fix the things I've listed above I am going to keep this thread locked. So, PM me when you have.
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