[Peer Review]Meditation[Skill]

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[Peer Review]Meditation[Skill]

Postby Clyde Sullins on December 13th, 2015, 6:53 pm

Alright, responding to and editing for Naiya's review:

- quotation- The reason for this quotation is because this is referring to something very specific, which is mentioned on the personal magic lore. However its not clear I see now what I was referring to, so I've added a note and a link to the mentioned quote.

- Edited repetitious and wordy bit about fighting sweet whispers.

- commas, commas, I have issues with commas. Edited in. In reference to all missed comma comments. Of which there were a lot. :D

- leeching difference explanation reworded.

- Commas, dependent clause, sentence structure reworded about "over a period of time" thing.

- combat intro changed as advised.

- injury not damage

- Them from you.

- observation intro edit.

- gnosis- I'm keeping the list as is, but only because one it is a partial list, not necessarily listing all of the gnosis aided by meditation. Two, all of the mentioned gnosis specifically mention being assisted by meditation. Whether or not these others are aided, I don't think it specifically mentions so on their lore.

However yes, most if not all of those would likely be aided by meditation, or various techniques used by those skilled in mediation.

- headers formated.

Alright, I think everything has been dealt with. I plan to post this up for founder review shortly.
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