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[Jungle Wilds] Interrupted Meal

Postby Soshakuakamamushi on July 26th, 2013, 10:27 am

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The Jungle Wilds, 14th of Bell, 14th of Summer 513 A.V

Aka was hungry, dead hungry. Her last three days had been filled with hard work... working at the tunnels, sparring against Senka, and patrolling the jungle complete with killing her first Myrian. She had been using her reimancy in three days in a row, while she was really careful not to overgive herself, it was still really tiring. She wanted to eat something... something alive and beating, her Dhani instinct kicked in, she craved to swallow some fresh meat.

"Uuuh..." Rubbing her stomach in hunger, Aka exited Zinrah through the eastern tunnel, passing by some constrictor guards along the way. They just scoffed at the tiny Dhani, the only reason she was accepted here was because Mamuro, one of their kin, brought her in and she also worked under Senescaaspia. She was accepted, but that didn't mean she was respected, Aka would have to work hard to appease her giant siblings.

"Hungry... uuuh, why can't they just give me some food..." She was complaining again, like usual, Aka needed a good smack on her head to learn that in this place, she needed to work for the things she got, especially since she's an outsider, Dhani or not, she's not one of the Constrictors. Aka walked for a few chimes before she looked around and decided that hunting for a delicious tapir would be easier in her viper form. She was much quicker and agile in that form anyway... and she was also smaller, harder to be detected by her prey.

Aka easily removed her sash and simple black dress, neatly folded them, and put it on a rock, she didn't wear any underwear so she could immediately began transforming. Her arms and legs fused, hair disappeared, red scales with constant black spots adorned her body, and finally after thirty seconds, the black-haired pale woman was gone, replaced by the crimson hissing venomous snake. Now... what should I do first... Aka slithered forward, her tongue licked the air for any scent of a herbivore... preferably a capybara or a tiper. Meeting a boar would be a challenge... meeting a panther would be very dangerous... and meeting a Myrian tiger would be... well, let's not get to that part.

She flexed her body and leaped forward to travel faster, curling her serpentine body to soften her landing. Even in this foreign land, Aka still loved to do one of her favorite activity, acrobatics, the defining trait of a Viper. Aka kept jumping around until the scent of an animal reached her. Using her excellent sense of smell, taste, and hearing, only available to her Viper and Dhani form, she tracked the smell and concentrated to hear her target's footsteps. It was not too heavy... Aka could only hope it's a tapir or capybara and not a panther or... *shudders* tiger.
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[Jungle Wilds] Interrupted Meal

Postby Soshakuakamamushi on July 26th, 2013, 2:32 pm

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Aka slithered swiftly, making as little sound as possible, using the scent as her guide and the footsteps as her auxiliary detection method. When the scent was strong enough, Aka stopped, at this distance, she could see a... Yes! tapir grazing on a low-growing plant leaves. Aka studied the tapir, its back was facing her, a perfect position for an ambush. She coiled herself and slithered her forked tongue, relishing in the warm fresh smell. She flexed her jaws and prepared her fangs, venom ready to be injected to the tapir.

Flexing her muscles, she then released her coil and sprang forward, jaws open and fang ready, only to have the tapir being hit by an arrow seemingly out of nowhere and it fell to its side, Aka missed her target as the result. She coiled herself and maneuvered to soften her landing. W-w-what just happened?! She landed behind a bush, turned around, poke her serpentine head to see the dying tapir. Her slitted eyes widened a bit in surprise when she heard voices... in a foreign language and they were shouting something. Could it be? She turned her head to her left and by Siku... she was right, three Myrians were approaching the tapir, wielding bow and arrows.

Even Aka could see they were also hunting the tapir and the cautious look on their face meant that they saw a glimpse of her swift strike and of course... Myrians hate all things serpentine, their savage eyes darted left and right, obviously looking for the damned viper. They haven't found her yet... Aka could thank her small stature, she was small enough to coil herself underneath the bush, but it was only a matter of time before they found her and... she would be forced to fight for her life. Oh Siku... why?
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[Jungle Wilds] Interrupted Meal

Postby Soshakuakamamushi on July 26th, 2013, 2:48 pm

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Aka needed to think fast, she assessed the situation. She was in her viper form... fast, agile, and a much smaller target compared to those giant Constrictors. These Myrians were most likely never faced a Viper before, from her experience just yesterday. They were getting closer and one of them examined their hunted game, the tapir. Something snapped within Aka, Oh hey! That's my kill! Yes! It was supposed to be hers! She prevented herself from hissing in anger. She did something else instead... oh those cannibals were going to get some whooping.

She concentrated, opened her mouth, and blew her res from it. The slimy res gathered in front of her in the form of a floating reddish ball of slime. Those Myrians were grouped together and Aka knew just what to do... aside from preparing the ball, Aka also coated her fangs with res as well. She wanted to survive this... no, she must survived this. Aka ignited the ball floating in front of her mouth, poked her head, and launched it. The fireball sang through the air and when the Myrians shouted something that sounded offensive when they turned her head and saw the flaming projectile. Aka hissed, fully igniting the res inside the fireball, and *BOOM!* the fireball exploded.

One Myrian got a direct hit and promptly fell to the ground, his body burning he howled in pain and rolled on the ground, desperately trying to extinguish the fire. The other two Myrians was stunned by the light and heat, cursing in a foreign language. Aka coiled herself and immediately launched herself, spinning once in the air to gain striking power, faced one of the stunned Myrian, bared her fangs, and punctured the Myrian's neck with it. "Sssssss!" She hissed in battle-fury.

The Myrian desperately tried to pull Aka off her punctured neck, but Aka quickly slithered her body, coiling around the Myrian, not in the bone-breaking way of the Constrictors, but to merely get a foothold on his body. She then injected something into his neck... not her venom, but her res that was coating it. The last Myrian recovered from his stun and promptly saw his friend... with a strangely small Dhani coiling around his body, he aimed his bow to the Dhani, but she was too small and he could possibly hit his comrade instead. He faltered in his aim... and opted to brandish his gladius and charged at his friend instead, aiming to cut down Aka.
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[Jungle Wilds] Interrupted Meal

Postby Soshakuakamamushi on July 26th, 2013, 3:24 pm

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"Rah!" The last Myrian swung his gladius.. caraefully as to not hit his friend and nicked Aka at the middle section of her body. "Sssss!" Aka hissed in pain, but she managed to inject all of the res coating her fangs. Aka uncoiled her body and jumped away from the Myrian, the bitten Myrian immediately hold his neck, feeling something foreign inside his body. He screamed in panic mixed with confusion and... he heard an ominous hiss... which followed by the res inside his neck ignited, cooking his throat from inside.

"Gu-gugugu!" The Myrian made pitiful gurgling sound as his throat glowed bright red and smokes literally coming out from every hole on his head, his mouth, eyes, and ears. His comrade didn't know on what to do, not that he could anything anyway... he was not a reimancer. It didn't take long before the flame cooked the Myrian's throat and head, his lifeless body fell down with a thud. The last Myrian gritted his teeth, anger and rage filled his eyes as he looked at his fallen comrades then... at this blasted tiny snake! By now, it was clear than the snake was obviously a Dhani, normal snakes cannot launch fireballs from its mouth.

He roared and charged at Aka, swinging down his gladius to tear her to pieces, Aka's heart beat very fast, she completely focused herself in fully utilizing her agility and coiled herself then jumping away from the Myrian, gaining some distance. Aka prepared more res in the shape of a slime ball inside her mouth, the Myrian caught notice and grabbed his bow, notched an arrow, and fired it at the casting Dhani.

It was hard to hit a slithering target on the ground with a bow, more so if it's fast and much smaller than one's usual targets. Aka slithered out of the way, then dashed around the Myrian, circling to confuse him. The Myrian studied her movements and timed his shot at Aka's predicted path. He fired, but Aka changed her direction towards him instead, what was the Viper going to do? He brandished his gladius but it was too late, the snake slithered from his feet, to his lower body, torso, shoulder, and her head finally came face to face with him, her mouth then opened, revealing a strange reddish ball of slime... which immediately launched itself and splattered his face and eyes. He swung his gladius blindly but the viper already jumped off his body.

Aka hissed, her gesture in viper form for activating her res. small pebbles and sharp rocks around the Myrian then reacted to the res, launching themselves and pelting both of his eyes with it. Causing numerous small stab wounds and destroying his eye sockets. The Myrian howled in pain, but Aka wasn't finished yet. She hissed once again and willed her res, transforming the gathered pebbles into lava, the fiery liquid melting the Myrian's skin, flesh, eyes, bones, and brains. He obviously dropped dead soon after.
Last edited by Soshakuakamamushi on September 16th, 2013, 12:31 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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[Jungle Wilds] Interrupted Meal

Postby Soshakuakamamushi on July 26th, 2013, 3:40 pm

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It was over... it was definitely over, but not yet... Aka found the first Myrian, the one that got hit directly by her fireball was still alive, laying on the ground half-dead, whispering words she couldn't understand. Aka almost felt guilt and pity... but then she remembered how these savages slaughtered her brethren like there was no tomorrow, these people was determined to commit genocide against the children of Siku.

A tear fell from Aka's eye, not because of the Myrian, but because the hardships these constrictors must be facing. They could not know peace because of... of them and one of them was still alive, groaning in pain at his acute burn wounds. Aka hissed in anger and slithered to on top of his body... staring him directly into his eyes. The Myrian cursed in his native language and still got the energy to spat at her, that was the last straw... Aka opened her jaw, coated her fangs with res, and bit down to his neck, injecting it.

She slowly released her bite and slithered off from his body, then without turning around, Aka hissed and the res ignited, finishing the Myrian. At least Aka provided her with a quick death instead of leaving him here to be eaten by the various predators that lurked in the forest.

Now that her enemies lay dead, Aka remembered her stomach as her adrenaline died down... she was wounded by the gladius, tired, and hungry. Aka looked at the dead tapir and... decided that swallowing it whole was kinda dangerous, she couldn't afford the extra weight. Besides, because of her time spent with Galbern, Aka preferred to eat the "human" way, taking chunks out of meat instead of swallowing them whole. It also helped as her small stature couldn't afford to swallow large prey like the Constrictors.

Aka concentrated and began transforming to her human form, after thirty seconds, a naked woman with pale skin and black hair reaching to just below her waist replaced the red snake, she also got a cut on her right side of waist courtesy of the Myrian earlier. Seeing no one was around, Aka couldn't afford to delay... she created a small amount of res on her right hand and gathered some rocks, shaping it into a make-shift stone dagger. She approached the tapir, knelt down beside it, and began cutting pieces of meat. Aka winced as she put the raw meat inside her mouth... it would have to do for now, at least she's not forced to eat vegetables... ugh.

Next to her dead mortal enemies, the Viper feasted. It was clear that all this battle was taking its toll on Aka's morality and conscience. Soon, she would find taking the lives of sentient creatures to be an ordinary thing to do... just like most of her Constrictor brothers and sisters.
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[Jungle Wilds] Interrupted Meal

Postby Traverse on July 30th, 2013, 4:26 am

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Aka

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Hunting1 XP
Observation 2 XP
Planning 1 XP
Reimancy 1 XP
Wrestling 1 XP





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Having Your Kill Stolen
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Addtional Comments :
So I have some issues with this thread, but we'll start here:

She flexed her body and leaped forward to travel faster, curling her serpentine body to soften her landing. Even in this foreign land, Aka still loved to do one of her favorite activity, acrobatics, the defining trait of a Viper.


Snakes don't leap. The action you described, of Aka coiling and lunging a couple posts down is the most accurate way to describe how a snake might lift itself off the ground, but two other times you describe Aka jumping in her viper form, and it simply isnt logical. Also, I pulled this quote because once again you are specifically mentioning your acrobatic skill. That word might be apt in one or two circumstances, but bringing it up this often will get you the opposite of what you are searching for, describe physical actions instead of mentioning that she did acrobatics.

I also am a bit bummed about your illustrations of reimancy so far. I didn't mention using Reimancy artistically in your job thread just for giggles, it is a very distinctive art form in the realm of magic, and I have only seen you describe it in a very base level, listing your use of res and shaping in a single sentence, and not giving me real meat. Reimancy is an addicting and tantalizing medium, yet all you've given your readers thus far is that Aka has been very cautious of over giving, which you've mentioned twice in almost the same way in two threads. You have only touched on Aka getting tired after using reimancy, something you didn't even mention in this thread after she had used a series of extremely complex maneuvers in a row.

I would suggest re-reading the Reimancy lore page, as well as checking on other reimancy threads to see how they deal with it. Yes at higher levels of the skill, doing simple things doesn't necessitate a lot of description, but this is a continual thing I have seen from you, and it will result, as it has in a couple threads already, in netting you less XP for your efforts.


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