GRADE AWARDS!
Overall, not a bad read in terms of content. However, there are a few layout problems I'd like to address. Please remember to include punctuation, mainly commas. These help to break down sentences into more readable segments. In some places you didn't put any punctuation in the entire paragraph, making it very hard to decipher. The other thing is random Capitalisation. You've given some words capitals where they don't need it, and some lowercase when they do need it. Simply proof-reading before submitting should fix this, or running it through a word processor.
Zifor
Skills:
- Observation: +2
- Acting: +2
- Hypnotism: +1
- Unarmed Combat: +2
- Acrobatics: +1
- Weapon (Dagger): +1
- Endurance: +1
- Running: +1
- Socialisation: +3
- Teaching: +1
Lores:
- Unarmed Combat: Basic Arm Block
- Unarmed Combat: Brute Strength
- Unarmed Combat: Speed of Attack Important
- Alex: Are You For Real, Man?
- Alex: Practiced Fighter
- Alex: Practitioner of a Strange Magic
Gained/Lost:
| + | - |
| Bruises | * |
Notes:
Bruising all over body in patches. Will lose tenderness after 7 days, and will have faded completely after 15 days.
Alex
Skills:
- XP
- XP
Lores:
- Lore
- Lore
Gained/Lost:
| + | - |
| Thing | Thing |
Notes:
Grades withheld due to retirement.
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