[Note by Antipodes] Granforth

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Granforth

Postby Granforth on May 4th, 2018, 4:11 am

Granforth


Appearance

Race: Human
Gender: Male
Age: 73
Birthday: 4, Winter, 445.
Birthplace: The Streets of Sunberth

Appearance: Human with long lankey body, a large point nose, sharp chin, and thin white hair with wispy strands. Aged about 73 years with the withered features of a crabapple. Wrinkled and skinny with a distinct smell of dirt and wood, his religious garb dirtied with mud and covered in dust.

Character Concept
A traveling priest of Dira, whose final wish is to die fullfilling his duty to put all the dead he can to proper rest. With building pyres and burying bodies on the road, Granforth will meet his end when it comes. A smile plastered on his withering face.

Character History

Raised by a family of undertakers, Granforth originally wished to be an adventurer and explore the world. It wasn't until his near death experience, when he suffered from a terrible sickness, that the young man realized that death was the scariest. At his young age he wished to be immortal and hide from his fate that all share, and stayed in the city where it was relatively safe. That was, until the wizard, Obal Causten, had razed the city in his name. Granforth and his family lived in hell for 14 years, where death surronded the young gravekeeper to the end. More and more holes being dug every day, and the young saw more corpses than people. So it was, that the aging Granforth learned of the truth of the world, that death would come eventually and it seemed the worst of it was that spirits haunted the lands. Lost, confused, and pained by the cold unfeeling that was death, Granforth pitied them greatly. He wished for nothing more than to give them rest.


Language

Fluent Language: Common





Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Spiritism 15 RB, 15 SP 30 Competent
Carpentry 20 SP 20 Novice
Weapon:Shovel 15 SP 15 Novice




Lores
Lore of Disease
Lore of Death Rites

Possessions
1 Set of Clothing
-Simple Shirt
-Simple Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Simple Coat
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Metal)
-Brush (Metal)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
-4 Person Tent
-100ft of rope
350 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: A Shovel with Notches on the Handle, counting to about the 20s

Housing

Location: Sunberth

House: None

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM
Horse Cash-in +250 GM 350 GM


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Granforth

Postby Antipodes on May 4th, 2018, 6:50 am

Hey there! I'm Antipodes, one of the CS Liasons for Miz, and I'm here to help you achieve the coveted green check mark.

I love what you have so far and appreciate you taking the time to read and include some of Sunberth's history into your character! There are, however, a few minor things I just want to touch on before I send you on for approval.

☉ Birthdate Sometimes these are tricky but as we are not yet in Winter of 518, your character would still be 72. If you wish him to be 73 then change his birth year to 444 AV.

☉ Occupation You mention that he is a priest of Dira however this requires having three gnosis marks from the Goddess. May I suggest looking into the role of Undertaker (and potentially rearranging your skills to include the undertaking skill) and applying in the Help Desk to gain a gnosis/become an Eiyon (marked by Dira). Once that is granted, you may discuss becoming the equivalent of a single marked follower (listed as 'alter boy' in the occupation list). This gnosis stub breaks down the application process.

I also suggest amending your appearance section to reflect this.

☉ Lores Lores are your character's knowledges and tend to be specific. The lores you currently have listed are far too broad. Some practical suggestions are:

    Lore of Sunberth Street Layout (so he knows how to get around the city)
    Lore of Sunberth Culture (so he knows how Sunberthians are)
    Lore of Religion: Dira (since he is a follower)
    Spiritism: How to create Soulmist (since he is competent in Spiritism)
I'm open to discussing others if these don't appeal.

☉ Housing From the looks of your ledger and possessions, I believe you have chosen the tent package. Please specify this and perhaps note he lives in the Tent City.


You've got a great foundation here, he just needs a bit of fine tuning. I welcome you to touch base with me via PM or on Discord (I'm usually lurking) if you have any and all questions. I'm here to help :) And do let me know once edits have been made!
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