Character Sheet Help 2.0

[Forlatt]

Hey guys, building my first character here.
Could someone see if it's fit to play with?

Thanks in advance ^^

[Phoenix]

Hey there everyone. Filling in for Shepherd!

Lem, I placed and intervention on your CS. Please take a look at it

Keda, I placed and intervention on your CS. Please take a look at it

Nas, I placed and intervention on your CS. Please take a look at it

Gerard, You are good to go. Happy posting!

Olimpia, I sent you a PM regarding your CS in response to the PM you sent me.

Yernaver, You are good to go. Happy posting!

Dalyeni, I placed and intervention on your CS. Please take a look at it

Theur, I placed and intervention on your CS. Please take a look at it

Forlatt, I placed and intervention on your CS. Please take a look at it

[Allison]

If anyone could review my CS I'd really appreciate it

[Frederica Reinhart]

Finished my first character!

http://www.mizahar.com/forums/topic23771.html

I hope I did well. Thank you in advanced for looking over it.

[Shepherd]

Announcement Hello Mizaharians, In the last few weeks we've had a strange rise in the breaking of a protocol. Players have been posting on other players' Character Sheets. This under no circumstances is okay. The only people with the authority to post on a Player's Character Sheet, is that player, a Character Sheet Liaison, Assistant Storyteller, Domain Storyteller, Regional Storyteller, and Founders. If you are not one of these people, do not post on anyone's Character Sheet that is not your own. If you would like to lend a helping hand, you are allowed to send the player a PM, but I strongly suggest you attack Liaisons to the message. This is because we are the experts, and there may be things that you as a player miss. And if you do message them, be extremely polite. Thank you, Shepherd.

[Shepherd]

Allison - I placed an intervention on your CS. Frederica Reinhart - I fixed a coding error in your 2nd post. You had a frame tag coming before a framepic. I also placed an intervention on your CS.

[Rih]

Just need a little help with skills, living arrangements, and of course family. I was wondering do i just reference a npc say that i live with them, or do i have to do something more. I also think i have a good understanding on skills i was just wondering if someone could give me some advice on what would be good for an Akalakian child to start off with. The lore i will tackle after these issues. Thank you for your time.

CS :

Rih Physical Description Name: Rih Race: Akalak Age: 14 Birthday: Winter 498 AV Height: 5’ 1” Rih is very much an Akalakian child with dark deep red skin that looks black unless one was to stand very close to him. Like most Akalak his body is toned and well-kept without making him bulky with his short height. His hair is kept very short in a thin layer and his young body has not started to grow facial hair nor body hair, but he imagines that he would keep them hair free anyway. His face is still that of a boy, smooth and mostly round, but already his hands are rough and callused from his practice of smithing and swordplay. The same goes with his feet as he favours doing almost everything that he can get away with barefoot, earning him quite a bit of scars on his feet from objects that have fallen on them over the years. Really he doesn’t stand out to much from the crowd of Akalak males that have made their homes in RIverfall, but there is one thing that is uncommon about him and that is his eyes. While it’s not a huge noticeable difference, one of his eyes is a very low toned white, while his other eye is a very high gray. Most people can’t see the difference even standing right in front of him until he closes one eye and then in turn the other, but once noticed it becomes what others usually focus on even if they don’t realize it. He is really a happy child, and besides the struggle to understand his darkness, which really is just a struggle to find balance, he has no real strife in his life. Character Concept Rih wants nothing more than to lead what he considers an average life. For him it means bringing honor to his self and his people, contributing to his community where ever that maybe, do his best to sire a child, and finally to protect the people and things he cares about. Unfortunately his emerging dark side seems to want almost exactly the opposite. Seemingly selfish and spiteful the other persona craves nothing more than to indulge in pleasures. The other cares nothing for society nor does he like working with others in any task and will only endure it for so long, before either quitting altogether or rushing ahead to do his own thing. Still Rih does his best to understand that his opposite has as much right to the body they share, and often will reason with his other to keep control if only while in the public’s eye, or until the tasks he has are completed. Whatever the dishonour brought onto themselves by either one’s behaviour or actions, Rih will do almost anything to restore it. Character History Possessions 1 cotton shirt 1 Pair of cotton pants 1 Pair of undergarments 1 Pair of leather shoes 1 Water skin 1 Backpack which contains: -Comb (Bone) -Brush (Bone) -Soap -Razor -Balanced Rations (1 Weeks’ Worth) -1 eating knife -Flint & Steel Heirloom: (50gm Worth) 100 Golden Housing: Permanent Housing: You can start with a roughly 20x20 cave in the residential wing of the nest. Other housing arrangements, such as for non-Dhani, must me made with a Falyndar Moderator. Ledger Purchase Cost Total Starting +100 GM 100 GM Skills, Lores, Magics, Gnosis, Languages Common Skills: Trade skills related to Hunting, Wilderness Survival, Combat Skill EXP Total Proficiency Skill 1 # SP # Novice Skill 2 # SP # Competent Skill 3 # RB, # SP # Competent Practiced Languages: Common Snake-tongue Fluent Language: Basic Language: Poor Language: Helpful Lores: (Pick 2) Lore of Zinrah Layout Lore of Dhani Culture Lore of History of The Dhani Lore of History of The Myrians Lore of Religion: Caiyha Lore of Religion: Siku Thread List

[Piraen Saneka]

My CS is up and ready for approval whenever someone has time.

[Nyctea]

After days of attempting to familiarize myself with this incredible world of Mizahar, I think I'm finally ready to introduce my first character. I'd completely appreciate a check-over, and all thanks in advance for the time taken to read over the length of my CS.

Again, thanks =D No really, you're all awesome!

[Nestriel]

i need somebody to check my CS..I'm not totally sure if it's good enough so lots of help, from anybody, would be greatly appreciated(: