[Issues found by Kraken] Striker

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Striker

Postby Striker on January 16th, 2013, 2:21 am

Striker
Race: Ghost
Birthday: October 19
Age: 25
Gender: Male

Pale white skin, always wears his body armor, black hair, white eyes with black centers

He is very violent and loves to fight, but he can only use the sword he died with in battle. He hates taking orders, but is good to have along because his sword can open up cracks in the ground, it can also summon lightning, and he can teleport you anywhere. Also he is a good warrior and will fight even if fighting is futile. He is an expert healer too.

Before he was a ghost Striker was a syliran knight. He was a lead general and had excellent battle experience. Then in one battle there were too many enemies and they killed every last man until only striker was left and they tortured him trying to get him to reveal the syliran's plans. When he wouldn't they killed him. In the end he was rewarded . The gods let him live on to fight another day, but they could only make him a ghost. Because of that Striker got an enchanted sword.

Possesions
1 enchanted sword
1 Roman centurion shield
1 set of Roman body Rmor
1 Roman javelin
1 Roman kilt
1 Roman knife
1 Roman helmet
A pair of Roman sandals

Family heirloom
1 Roman cavalry horse (that is also a ghost)

Housing
1 Roman infantry tent that can move from place to place





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Striker

Postby Kraken on February 7th, 2013, 10:27 pm

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Hi there!

I'm Kraken, your friendly neighbourhood Character Sheet Liaison! I'm here to help make your experience on Mizahar go as smoothly as possible. Now, there are just a few quick points we need to sort out in order for your character to move forward. If you have any questions whatsoever, please don't hesitate to ask!

Welcome to Mizahar, Striker! I noticed a few primary issues in your CS which you'll need to address before continuing.

Please review the Starting Guide and Character Sheet lore. Unfortunately, your CS does not meet the requirements. You are missing a number of sections, including skills, lores, and languages. You've also made reference to "Roman" equipment. Rome does not exist in Mizahar. Please review the Theme lore. I would also recommend using a template for your starting city and filling in the appropriate info.

If you could also re-review the introductory PM you received upon signing up for Mizahar, that should be very helpful to get you started. Thanks for understanding!

Once you address these notes and make the proper changes, please send me a private message and I'll gladly remove this post.

Thanks, and happy writing!


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