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Not found on any map, Endrykas is a large migrating tent city wherein the horseclans of Cyphrus gather to trade and exchange information. [Lore]

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Old Made New (Rue)

Postby Colt on July 28th, 2014, 3:32 pm

ImageShe looked at him fully, and Shahar had the sudden inclination to step back and away, to distance himself from the confusing woman before him.

She herself didn’t seem to be in a much better state; she began to sign confusion, lack of understanding with a broad, indistinct inflection. Shahar’s hands began to hover on the precipice of a reply, although his signs were undefined and meaningless. What was he supposed to say?

Yes, came a final, decisive motion. It may be be best if you do.

So that was it, then. Whatever lay unspoken between them, good or ill, it would remain unspoken. It was time to leave. Shahar was hesitant for a moment, but then it turned into a thank you that was thick with formality, as one might thank a stranger. He didn’t say anything else, simply turned and left the shop, laden with clothing.

His mind whirled as he left the tent behind, trying to process what had made the communication between he and Rue so volatile––and even more so, what exactly it was that had happened between them in the first place. The unexpected intimacy had been alarming at first, but he’d realized the necessity of it and forced that alarm to disappear. But in its absence, something else entirely had sprung between them, something that he didn’t know whether he wanted to forget or remember.
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Old Made New (Rue)

Postby Naiya on July 28th, 2014, 9:39 pm

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After what seemed like a long moment Shahar thanked her, stiff with formality, and left the shop without a second glance.

She had made herself a fool, letting her emotions run rampant, and falling into his arms like a child with a crush. What would her father have to say about such behaviors? Surely he would not approve, more likely he would have her issue a formal apology to the man, and who knew what punishment she would face for the embarrassment it would cause her pavilion.

Her heart sank further, she had indeed embarrassed her family, and she wasn't looking forward to the consequences. Worse than anything they could inflict on her though, was the pain she already felt, the hollow spot in her chest, and the loss of his arms holding her up.

That was her true pain, and she couldn't imagine a worse punishment.


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Old Made New (Rue)

Postby Khida on September 28th, 2014, 12:12 am


Shahar Dawnwhisper


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Diplomacy +1
Negotiation +1
Observation +4
Seduction +2
Socialization +5
  • Comparing cotton and linen cloth
  • Diplomacy: a strategic retreat
  • Rue Nightsong: a disconcerting, compelling presence
  • Rue Nightsong: seller of clothes
  • The relative values of fabric and fur
  • Shopping means making decisions
  • The stranger in the mirror


This is the point where I should award inventory changes, but I'm not entirely clear what Shahar walked away with, here -- 2 tunics and 2 pair trousers? One of each? In the future, I recommend putting an OOC note summarizing the final trade, for clarity and so the grader can double-check value.

Rue Nightsong


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Diplomacy +1
Negotiation +1
Observation +3
Seduction +2
Sewing +1
Socialization +5
  • Diplomacy: presenting an amiable mien
  • Properties of linen fabric
  • Properties of cotton fabric
  • The relative values of fabric and fur
  • Sewing: different cloth weights for different seasons
  • Sewing: measurements of the lower body
  • Shahar Dawnwhisper: a disconcerting, compelling presence
  • Shahar Dawnwhisper: a man of simple answers


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This was a lovely read. I enjoyed how it went from standard business transaction to something strikingly personal, and I look forward to reading its future repercussions.

Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns regarding your grade. Also, Rue, please edit your request to show this thread has been graded.
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