Amon Ironheart Terras
Skills:
Observation: +2,
Negotiation: +1,
Socialisation: +4
Lores:
✦ Alvadas Location: The Stallion's Rear
✦ The art of getting drunk
✦ Nameless woman from the Stallion's Rear
Notes: Hi Amon! Nice writing, I love the dark tone and I believe you brought across Amon's pain and suffering well. If you would like more skill points however, I might suggest that instead of writing things from the NPCs point of view, write it from Amon's point of view. However, as a story, I really enjoyed this, and stories are what it's all about, right?
Observation: +2,
Negotiation: +1,
Socialisation: +4
Lores:
✦ Alvadas Location: The Stallion's Rear
✦ The art of getting drunk
✦ Nameless woman from the Stallion's Rear
Notes: Hi Amon! Nice writing, I love the dark tone and I believe you brought across Amon's pain and suffering well. If you would like more skill points however, I might suggest that instead of writing things from the NPCs point of view, write it from Amon's point of view. However, as a story, I really enjoyed this, and stories are what it's all about, right?
Sayana
Skills:
Stealth: +1
Planning: +2
Hypnotism: +4
Intelligence: +2
Persuasion: +2
Negotiation: +1
Lores:
✦ Alvadas location: The Stallion’s Rear
✦ Intelligence: Finding information by sharing secrets
✦ Contact: Nameless Isur from the Stallion’s Rear
Notes: Sayana, I loved how you wrote the hypnotism here, I could feel it through your writing. I can see Sayana being a very good hypnotist sometime in the future! The emotions in this thread were very vivid, and it was very enjoyable to read!
Stealth: +1
Planning: +2
Hypnotism: +4
Intelligence: +2
Persuasion: +2
Negotiation: +1
Lores:
✦ Alvadas location: The Stallion’s Rear
✦ Intelligence: Finding information by sharing secrets
✦ Contact: Nameless Isur from the Stallion’s Rear
Notes: Sayana, I loved how you wrote the hypnotism here, I could feel it through your writing. I can see Sayana being a very good hypnotist sometime in the future! The emotions in this thread were very vivid, and it was very enjoyable to read!
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