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Autumn falls severely ill and needs some medical help.

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A Helping Hand (Devi)

Postby Autumn Wilde on December 21st, 2014, 5:30 am

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Okay so.. Ronan? Was that the name? Not a knight, just a helping blacksmith. Autumn thought as Devi spoke of him. That was when the knock came at the door. Autumn had finished a little over half of the tea, practically chugging it when she discovered it's delightful taste. The knock surprised her, causing a small dribble to drop down her shirt while she was drinking it. She wiped it away quickly while Devi went to answer the door.

The doctor must have recognized who it was, because no words were exchanged, yet she still opened the door. The first thing Autumn noticed was how dirty the man was. Black smudges everywhere, his overalls spotted with more smudges, but he was smiling and staring straight at her. Then that's when she noticed the beautiful instrument he held in his hand.

She gave out an unintentional gasp of delight and automatically reached for it, wincing as her injured arm moved. When it was handed to her the rest of the room faded away. All of the relief washed over her in an enormous wave. Imagine being so thirsty that you can barely breathe, you've got some sort of phlegm in your throat that just won't go away, and then getting the coolest, most delicious drink of water you have ever had in your life. That's what it felt like.

Immediately she began to scan the gea'tar. It had been in the road after all, who knows what kind of damage it could have taken. Autumn registered the bit of small talk Devi and, Autumn assumed the man was Ronan, at the back of her mind but all she could make out was that someone was pregnant.

Upon first glance the gea'tar seemed to have no immediate signs of damage. All of the strings were still there and there were no cracks. But there was one small chip in the side and a long white scratch that spanned along the entire body. Autumn clenched her jaw to control the sudden, unexpected anger. It was uncomfortable, to be angry at something like this. It was only a scratch, hardly noticeable, it wouldn't even affect the gea'tar's sound. But still, for the amount she had bought it for it was definitely worth complaining about. She suppressed the anger, thinking of the upsides to make it go away.

Nevertheless, Autumn sighed and set the gea'tar next to the bed, leaning it so she could reach the neck of it. At least she had the instrument now, but it wasn't much use to her if she couldn't play it. What an unfortunate situation. She thought.

That was when the tea started kicking in, and she suddenly felt a little bit drowsy. Devi finished her small conversation with her brother and turned back to Autumn. The woman's face had completely changed. She was smiling, had been laughing. It made her look so beautiful, to have that expression on instead of the stern but kind look she had been wearing for the time Autumn had seen her.

"My gea'tar is wonderful," She turned her gaze to Ronan, "Thank you very much, for everything." She said this as sincerely as she could muster, then leaned back against her pillow.

"I don't need anything for right now, thank you too, Devi. You really are an amazing doctor. At least what I can tell." Autumn let her eyes drop for a few seconds, and then remembering something she opened them again, fixing her gaze on Devi.

"You should smile more, you have a really pretty smile. It makes your eyes shine." Autumn smiled at the doctor. She hadn't meant add the last part, but between the drowsiness and the sickness and, well, everything, it was difficult to properly filter her thoughts and her words.

With that last comment, Autumn let her eyes close and stay closed as she quickly drifted into a much needed deep sleep. She knew this wouldn't be the last she saw of Devi, as her arm still had a long while to heal. She rather hoped that she would see the doctor even if she wasn't sick. Just in the streets or something. If Devi ever stopped by the 'Stallion at night, or the theater by day after Autumn's arm healed, the two would definitely meet. It was something Autumn looked forward to.


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A Helping Hand (Devi)

Postby Devi on December 22nd, 2014, 10:09 pm

Devi blinked in surprise. Autumn's last comment had been uttered in an increasingly drowsy tone, the last of it barely a whisper. Still she managed to convey her sincerity. It was... unusually touching. Devi shook her head a little. She had a feeling that the young musician was not accustomed to keeping thoughts to herself. It'll get you in trouble one day...

She and Ronan talked quietly whilst Autumn fell deeper and deeper asleep. Devi finished packing away her things and took advantage of Ronan's distracted state, sending him to retrieve the food and water she'd promised her patient. She would need to visit daily for a while, until the worst of the fever had passed. After that and assuming the bone reset correctly Autumn's arm would be stiff for a while. She'd need to exercise it well to get it back in playing condition.

Devi knew she would need to hone all of her persuasive skill to restrain her patient's...impatience. She found that she didn't mind the idea. Devi didn't tend to maintain friendships very easily, particularly female ones. The feminine disposition tended to be the sort that found her more than a little odd. There wasn't much she could say about her day to day that didn't kill a conversation.

When Ronan returned they left together, lightly bickering as they always did. She still had rounds to do, as well as visiting her sister-in-law and attempting to persuade her, half-heartedly, that Ronan hadn't revealed their news before the big reveal. As they made their way across the sparsely populated, exposed street back to their respective apartments, she pulled her coat as close as she could, thinking that Autumn certainly wouldn't be the last patient she'd treat for infection before the season was out.

Oh sleep, I'll see you again in the Spring...
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A Helping Hand (Devi)

Postby Sayana on January 10th, 2015, 2:09 am

Your Grades Have Arrived


Autumn

Skills:
Skill EXP
Endurance +2
Observation +5
Socialization +5
Storytelling +1
Planning +1


Lores:
  • Sickness: Fever, nausia, wheezing, coughing, headache
  • Experiencing a fractured arm
  • Devi: Doctor, my glowing guardian angel
  • What if my arm doesn't heal?
  • Where is my gea'tar??
  • Medicine: Rugberry and Iskyny tea help a fever
  • Medicine: Krolar paste to put on wounds
  • Ronan: Blacksmith, Devi's brother

Injuries and Illness :
Autumn has the symptoms of diphtheria and she will require 25 days of bedrest and medical attention to recover. She will be highly contagious for 28 days from this day onwards and was also contagious up to 4 days prior to this thread.

Autumn’s facial wounds will require 12 days to heal with minor scarring, given proper medical attention.

Autumn’s fractured right arm will require 55 days to heal, given proper medical attention. After that, she will need gentle but frequent rehabilitation exercises for 10 days for her arm to start functioning relatively normally and an extra 15 days for most of the effects to be gone.


Comments :
Great thread. I particularly enjoyed your vivid descriptions of Autumn’s sickness in your first post as well as your dream state when Autumn was unconscious. The strong sense of her illness kind of disappeared after she awoke, but perhaps she was feeling a lot better. Nevertheless, I liked how you created a real sense of panic in the fact that she might have lost her gea’tar and that she might not be able to play again if her arm didn’t heal.


Devi

Skills:
Skill EXP
Observation +2
Socialization +4
Medicine +4
Leadership +1
Rhetoric +4
Persuasion +3
Philtering +1
Teaching +1
Herbalism +1
Planning +2
Endurance +1


Lores:
  • Medicine: Clean body, clean soul
  • Autumn: Patient who plays the gea'tar
  • The usefulness of an assistant
  • Sleep is not a thing for doctors
  • Rugberry tea: Warms body, reduces fever chills
  • Iskyny tea: Helps patient sleep soundly
  • Krolar paste: Helps heal cuts
  • Wooden splint: Secures broken bones

Comments :
Great thread. On a grading perspective, there were a lot of different things you touched upon (hence so many skills awarded). I also really enjoyed the short interlude of Devi and her brother talking about a new niece/nephew. Devi seems to overall be a very patient and caring doctor.

As an aside, I noticed that your starting skills only totaled to 40 exp (starting points) and 15 exp (racial bonus). Starting packages are usually 50 exp (starting points) plus the racial bonus. So unless there is some specific reason why you can only have 40 starting points, I’d suggest adding in the extra 10 exp before you reach 50 posts (since you’re allowed to make changes to your CS before you reach 50 posts). Just remember that no skill can be higher than 30 points in your starting package.


Don't forget to edit/delete your grade request in the grade request thread.

If you have any questions or concerns about your grade please feel free to send me a message.

Enjoy.
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