Ally's CS

[Ally]

Ally



Race: Kelvic
Gender: Female
Age: About 18
Birthday: 14th, Summer, Year unknown.
Birthplace: The Wildlands

Appearance: When a human: Blonde hair, Big blue eyes. Soft skin.
When a cheetah: Flawless fur and Focused yellow eyes

Character History

Her parents are unknown. Her father died while protecting her mother during an unexpected birth and her mother died right after the birth. A traveler found Ally in The Wildlands and took care of her until she was about 17. He then kicked her out and they never saw each other again.

Language

Fluent Language: English


Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Farming # 10 # Novice
Combat # 10 # Novice
Hunting # 10 # Competent


Lores

Helpful Lores:
Lore of Syliran Culture
Lore of History of Syliran Knights

Possessions

1 Set of Clothing
-Simple Shirt
-Simple Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Simple Cloak or Coat
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Wood)
-Brush (Wood)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week's worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: 50gm

Housing

Location: Syliras Stormhold Castle

House: A 20x20 apartment

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM

[Crosspatch]

Hello there!

I'm Crosspatch, one of the friendly CS Liaisons on Mizahar! I've been looking over your Character Sheet, and I have noticed some minor issues that need to be resolved and fixed. Sadly these need to be done before you can continue roleplaying, so let's take a look at them shall we?

• Even if your character does not know the exact date, you must include a full date of birth. The Date of Birth must include a day, season and year. More information can be found on the Mizahar Calendar. As an additional note, Kelvics age at the same rate as which their base animal does, please take this into consideration (being 18 years old would make her an old Cheetah).
• You appear to be missing a character concept. A character concept covers points such as personality, likes, dislikes, ethics, values and what not, be sure to write it in. May I also suggest you expand upon your character's Appearance? For example including things like build, shape, height and weight to give readers a clearer understanding of your character.
• English is not a language option in Mizahar. A full list of languages can be found here - for the most part however, most characters can speak "Common" either at a fluent or basic level.
• At creation you have 50 skill points (SP) from the starter package to spend on skills, you have spend only 30. You are missing your character's Racial Bonus. As a Kelvic your RB is either +10 in Hunting, or +10 Foraging or +10 Unarmed combat. Skills are required to have between 5 and 30 skill points in them including the racial bonus.
• "Combat" is not a valid skill. In Mizahar combat is determined by use of a weapon skill, or through one of the unarmed skills; Brawling, Unarmed Combat, Boxing or Wrestling.
• As a note, Novice skills are 1 to 25, Competent skills are 26 to 50.
• Please choose a cloak or coat. You cannot have both.
• Your heirloom cannot be traded in for 50gm. It can be any one item as long as it is the value of 50gm or less, is meaningful to the character and is not magical in any shape or form.

Once these problems have been dealt with, drop me a PM and I'll remove this intervention and approve your CS for you. Also if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask and I'll do my best to answer!


Crosspatch