Completed The Candle, the Stick and the Back-Welts

Crowe teaches Bitt about overgiving

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This shining population center is considered the jewel of The Sylira Region. Home of the vast majority of Mizahar's population, Syliras is nestled in a quiet, sprawling valley on the shores of the Suvan Sea. [Lore]

The Candle, the Stick and the Back-Welts

Postby Bitt on March 28th, 2014, 12:32 pm

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4th Day of Spring, 514 AV

Bitt rasped his knuckles on the door to Crowe's quarters. Knock, knock, knock! The Syliran Knights were so well organised; Bitt only had to ask one of the stewards for directions to the room and he received them almost straight away. The muscle cramps that had plagued him since the other day had reduced to a dull ache; the two nights of recovery had done Bitt wonders. Thankfully, his young body recovered quickly. The door to the quarters swung open to reveal an old, bearded knight.
"Come in lad, we'd best get started," Crowe's tone sounded slightly different than usual. Bitt thought he almost sounded reluctant; he was probably just imagining things though. The squire nodded enthusiastically and stepped into the room.

It was a room that resembled most others in Syliras; small, windowless and humble. Granted, Crowe had this room to himself and didn't have to share it with anyone... then again, Bitt had his room to himself for now as well.
"Take a seat lad," Crowe prompted as he gestured towards an unlit candle that sat near the centre of the room on the floor; Bitt sat on one side of it and Crowe sat opposite him. Nothing was said for several chimes, which made Bitt anxious. He was about to say something himself when Crowe finally spoke.
"As I am sure you're aware lad, I can use magic. As your patron it is my duty to teach you what I know," Bitt listened eagerly, not wanting to miss any information. The prospect of learning magic was as frightening as it was exciting. Soon, Bitt would be more than a man; he would be one of those, a mage, "I will say this now; it will be a long time before you use any magic. I will not let you rush into this. I will do everything in my power to reduce your chances of overgiving some day." Bitt frowned at the words, but Crowe sounded serious. Bitt considered something while Crowe eyed him; apparently he was waiting for a response.
"What's overgiving?" was all that Bitt asked.
"Overgiving," Crowe began in a sombre tone, "is what happens when magic is abused. It will be the main subject of today's lessons," Crowe gestured towards the candle, "and this candle here is going to be your instructor."

Bit raised an eyebrow at the last part of Crowe's declaration. Crowe noticed the movement and frowned.
"Perhaps I didn't make myself clear lad," Crowe began, Bitt noted that Crowe's cheerful tone did not at all match the expression on his face, "allow me to clarify." Crowe stood and took the candle to one of the torches on the wall where he lit it. He returned it to its original position, took a seat, and stared down the young squire. Bitt's heart sank at his patron's next words.
"What are you waiting for lad? Place your hand above the flame and hold it there for as long as you can."

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The Candle, the Stick and Back-Welts

Postby Bitt on March 28th, 2014, 11:59 pm

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The candle was a simple one; it had a thick base and was able to stand of its own accord but beyond that would easily be described as plain. A flame danced on the wick, though perhaps danced isn't really the right word. Deep within the Stormhold Citadel not a single breath of wind blew. Without his parter the flame's dance was lethargic at best and practically non-existent. It burned with a stoic consistency and released tiny ribbons of smoke into the air. Bitt turned his attention from the flame back to his patron; Crowe looked at him expectantly. Bitt swallowed, twitched the fingers of his right hand, and motioned to hold it palm-down just above the miniature inferno.

Bitt furrowed his brow in concentration as he focused on the candle; one tick, two ticks, three ticks, four ticks, fi - "Ah!" With a flick of his wrist Bitt's hand shot away from the flame, he exhaled sharply and began to shake his hand slighty, as if to cool it down. He rose his gaze towards his patron, who still had stern expression on his face as opposed to the good-natured smile he'd usually give when Bitt hurt himself at Crowe's instruction. The sight tempered the anger that had flared within him; instead of an outburst, Bitt's next words were more controlled.
"What was the point of that?"
"Why did you pull your hand away from the flame lad?" Crowe's response came instantly.
"Because my hand was burning," To Bitt, the question seemed foolish as the answer was obvious. Still, he dutifully gave an answer.
"Yes lad, but how did you know your hand was burning?" Again, the question had an obvious answer.
"Because I could feel it. It felt hot. It hurt," Bitt gave a small string of similar answers, hoping one of them would satisfy his patron. The response gained a nod from Crowe, Bitt thought that to be a good sign.
"Exactly lad," Crowe began, "with something normal, your body will tell you when something is going wrong. The signs are obvious, it's your bodies way of protecting you." Bitt nodded, the concept made sense, but he still couldn't understand what any of this had to do with magic.

Crowe took a few chimes to consider his next words, he had to explain this without using terms or ideas still alien to Bitt; namely Djed.
"Lad, whenever you use magic, you're sticking your hand over the flame, metaphorically speaking of course -"
"What's a metaphor?" Bitt didn't want to interrupt his patron, but figured Crowe would prefer that he actually understood the lesson. Crowe nodded before continuing,
"A metaphor is a way of speaking used to describe things that are hard to explain by comparing them to something easier to understand," Bitt nodded, he more or less comprehended the explanation; sticking one's hand into the flame was a metaphor for using magic.
"Anyway lad," Crow continued, "unlike what happened just now, your body won't tell you when you've left your hand in the fire too long. No, it's worse than that; overgiving is sticking your hand into the flame and having it feel amazing. The feeling makes you want to use more and more magic, plunging your hand deeper into the fire. If you can't pull yourself away, all that will be left of you will be a pile of ash; regardless of how good it feels, you will get burned."

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The Candle, the Stick and Back-Welts

Postby Bitt on March 29th, 2014, 2:14 am

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The young squire and his patron sat in silence for several chimes. Bitt was stunned by Crowe's revelation; he had no idea magic was so dangerous for a user. He glanced at the bearded knight in a new light. When Bitt had seen Crowe use magic before, the process seemed so simple! Only now did Bitt realise how much of a risk Crowe had taken in using magic to fight.
"Why... how do you not overgive? Is there any way to tell when you've used too much magic?" With all the distractions a fight can bring, Bitt was amazed anyone was able to use a practical application of magic if it was so dangerous.
"It takes strong mental fortitude to me a mage lad," Crowe began, "you need to be able to focus on your task without being distracted by outside elements. You must still be aware of them; ignorance as to what is going on will only get you killed. Know your limits, recognise the signs and maintain a logical interpretation of all your emotions." Bitt nodded; he thought he understood.
"Will you teach me how?" Bitt asked tentatively; he was determined to show Crowe that he could do it. If his patron could manage it, then Bitt was confident that he could learn to as well. He just had to take his time and do it correctly. Crowe smiled softly at the young squire's gusto.
"Of course lad, that's why I'm here."

In through the nose, out through the mouth. In through the nose, out through the mouth. Bitt was kneeling where he had once been sitting, the candle had been moved and Crowe was pacing behind him. The kneeling position was uncomfortable and his legs, which were still sore from his antics in the training grounds, began to cramp. Behind him, the sound of his patron's boots made a constant thud, thud, thud as he moved. In through the nose, out through the mouth. Bitt's eyes were closed and he was breathing the way Crowe had told him to. Big, slow breaths; he had to ignore any and all distractions and focus on his breathing. When Bitt considered how brutal his introduction into his physical training had been, this was almost relaxing. He scowled slightly as he realised he'd let his mind wander. Focusing on only one thing was surprisingly difficult. In through the nose, out through the mouth.

Crowe noticed the lad's facial features twitch. With slow, deliberate movements he moved towards the door and picked up the reed he had prepared for this lesson; it was leaning against the wall. He wouldn't take any pleasure in what he was about to do and would never repeat it after today... despite that, it was important for the lad to understand that he'll have to ignore far worse than mere noises and mild discomfort. With a sigh he raised the reed and swung it towards the meditating boy's back.

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The Candle, the Stick and the Back-Welts

Postby Bitt on March 29th, 2014, 3:25 am

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Smack! The reed collided with Bitt's back and the young squire howled in pain. All thoughts of concentration vanished as he rolled forward and spun to face his patron. The young squire was propped on one knee and was clutching his back with one hand.
"What did you do that for!" Pain lanced through Bitt, the strike had left a shiny, red welt on his back. Of course, he couldn't see it, but the pain was evidence enough. Crowe, who was still holding the reed, was the obvious culprit.
"You just lost focus and fell victim to overgiving," was all the knight said. Bitt was speechless; had Crowe really just smacked him with a reed to prove a point?
"Of course I lost focus! You hit me with that stick!"
"Listen lad," Crowe sounded apologetic, "I don't think you're fully grasping how easy it is for a mage to lose focus and go into overgiving and what the repercussions could be. Say you're on a battlefield, in the back lines, preparing to throw a fireball or something of equal destructive power... Out of nowhere a stray arrow plunges into your shoulder and you lose focus, the spell backfires and explodes, killing not just you but any of your comrades that happen to be nearby. I can tell you right now lad, an arrow to the shoulder hurts a lot more than a little smack to your back." Bitt went silent as he considered the scenario Crowe presented him with and his face drained of all colour.
"I... I'm sorry Ser Crowe," the apology was sincere. Bitt had lashed out at his patron who was only trying to help him. A soft smile crept onto the older man's face,
"It's all right lad, your reaction was to be expected. Now, sit back down and focus on your breathing." Bitt was quick to comply,
"Yes Ser Crowe."

Over the next several bells Crowe struck Bitt with the reed three more times. There was no pattern to the blows, they merely served as a reminder. Each time he was hit Bitt grunted, howled or groaned in agony; any semblance of focus he had managed to gather blew away. Still he endured; in through the nose, out through the mouth. Bitt struggled to ignore the spikes of pain, the cramping in his legs and the frightening anticipation of Crowe's next attack. In through the nose, out through the mouth. In through the nose, out through the mouth.

"All right lad, time's up," Crowe finally spoke, "you're making progress. Not much, but you're making it, which is the important thing." Bitt nodded,
"Yes Ser Crowe."
"Make sure you practice in your own time. Until I think you've developed the proper mental fortitude I will not be teaching you any magic. Your lessons here will be divided between education and meditation until then."
"Yes Ser Crowe." After giving him a few more words in farewell, the old knight ushered Bitt from his quarters and left the squire to his own devices. Bitt was exhausted and sore. Despite that, he felt content. He had learnt a lot today. There were no short-cuts. All he could do was practice and get better, slowly but surely. Bitt decided he quite liked being a squire.

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The Candle, the Stick and the Back-Welts

Postby Ball on April 11th, 2014, 12:24 pm

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Welcome to Mizahar! This thread was a bit on the short side of things, but it was quite a nice read nonetheless. I like how you made it obvious that he has no idea about Magic and the dangerous and how a knight could very well train a novice in it. Beautifully done. I hope you can expand on it in the future.

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  • Magics: Overgiving is Bad
  • Magics: Enjoying your hand on fire metaphoric for Overgiving
  • Meditation: Concentration is Important
  • Magics: Giving into Unforgiving can kill

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