[Character Sheets] Character Sheet Review 3.0

[Adeon Tien]

[size=200]Adeon Tien Appearance Race:Nuit Gender:Male Age: 455 Birthday:58 A.V., Winter, 57th day. Birthplace:Somewhere in Falyndar Appearance: As of current, Adeon has dark hair, the usual Nuit signs, around six feet tall, and green eyes. He is in a Vantha Male’s body. Character Concept Adeon is a wandering Nuit, mostly docile. He is ashamed of his heritage, as it is clear to him, now, that his former greed for life was wrong. He now tries to hide it, hoping to fit into society. He usually fails, however, cast out of most societies (blocks, buildings, streets, etc.) after a month or two. He usually considers a suicide, but opts not to, as his finding may affect other docile Nuits as well, if he ever found anything. He decided to soldier through barren boredom, to find decency. Because he has yet to find any lasting compassion, Adeon has developed a somewhat bitter disposition and is usually untrusting. He no longer expects anyone to accept him, but wanders from community to community, following a hollow dream. Character History Most of Adeon’s past has been forgotten, but his spirit is at least a century old. After being chased out of a community, he would usually return to take the body of an evil or hurtful person, and then leave for good, leaving his old husk in the new body’s place. He’d continue this pattern anywhere he could, searching for any form of lasting compassion. Language Common, Vani Fluent Language:Common Basic Language:Vani Skills Skill EXP Total Proficiency Running SP 15 Novice Hiding SP 15 Novice Embalming +10RB, SP 20 Competent Lores Please choose two specific pieces of knowledge (lores). Hiding Behind Shadow/Hitchhiking Possessions 1 Set of Clothing -Simple Shirt -Simple Pants -Simple Undergarments -Simple Cloak or Coat -Simple Boots 1 Waterskin 1 Backpack which contains: -Comb (Wood) -Brush (Wood) -Soap -Razor -Balanced Rations (1 Week's worth) -1 eating knife -Flint & Steel 100 Gold Mizas Heirloom: A cloak, given to him by a stranger before casting Adeon out of his home. Housing Miniscule. It’s a tent. Location: Adeon is currently in Lhavit House: Adeon does not have a home, and rarely sleeps in anything but taverns or a tent. (HELPFUL HINT, Please Remove - Please choose either a housing package or a tent package.) Tent Ledger Purchase Cost Total Starting +100 GM 100 GM Thread List Link your current & past threads here!

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[Adeon Tien]

I just updated my very, very flawed character sheet. I hope you find it alright.

[Shinzu Kaesar]

Please review my Character Sheet

[Oriel]

Hi Liaisons! Can you please review my Character Sheet whenever possible. I'm already on the 4th page and just want to make sure you guys didn't miss me! But, please, there is no rush. Thanks a bunch! -Oriel Hieress

[Arysana]

Hey there!
This is the link to my character sheet!
http://www.mizahar.com/forums/post284662.html#p284662
I'd like to apologise right away for how long it is... I just needed a way to write down and solidify my PC. If I hadn't, I probably would have ended up making major changes about her personality and background as I actually played. I'm also unsure as to whether or not I did it correctly in regards to Lhavit's downward spiral and what not. From what I can recall, I think I assumed that the Ethaefal returned a year or two after they left.

Thanks!

[Jupiter]

Hello everyone!

Davin: :

Someone has approved your CS!

Hasier: :

I sent you a PM!

Kawa Snowsong: :

Someone has approved your CS!

Tar: :

Someone has approved your CS!

Aya By Night: :

I posted on your CS!

Kiyeri: :

I sent you a PM!

Coshizmo: :

I posted on your CS!

Adeon Tien: :

I have a post for your CS! But seeing as you don’t have a thread for it, I’ll be posting it below!

Hi Adeon!

I’m Jupiter, one of the Character Sheet Liaisons here in Mizahar! I’ve been looking over your character sheet and I found a few problems that will need to be fixed before you continue to play your character!

• You need to post your character sheet in an actual thread of it’s own! To do this, go to the Character Sheet forum and click on New Topic at the top!
• Your year of birth would be 57!
• In your languages, your common and basic languages cannot be the same!
• In your possessions, please choose between a cloak and a coat!
• The lores that you currently have don’t really work. I would recommend a simple rewording of them to fix this! Perhaps you could change Hiding Behind Shadows to Hiding in the Shadows. You need to change Hitchhiking to something that’s a bit more specific, like The Correct Way to Hitchhike.
• I would recommend that you choose either the tent package for your housing or choosing to turn in your housing for the 500 gm if you’re going to be living in the wilderness!
• Currently, since you don’t seem to have chosen any housing package, you will need to deduct the price of the tent from your ledger!
• If you are going to have your character living in the wild, you will need to have some skill points in the Wilderness Survival skill. This will also mean that you will need to change one of your lores to something pertaining to survival! This could be anything from how to light a fire to what plants are poisonous in an area!

Send me a PM once you’ve made the needed changes! Then I can approve your CS and you may continue to play your character! If you have any questions or anything, let me know and I’ll do what I can to clear things up for you!


Jupiter

Shinzu Kaesar: :

I sent you a PM!

Oriel: :

I sent you a PM!

Arysana: :

I sent you a PM!

Jupiter

[Aur Gold]

Posted my CS!

[Dublin Coxen]

My character sheet is up here for your leisurely reviewing pleasure. I'm still slowly answering the character development questions, but I think otherwise it's done! Thanks for the time you guys put into this! -Dublin

[Kujyaku]

I am ready for reviewing too!

http://www.mizahar.com/forums/topic37270.html

[Janba]

My character sheet is ready for review.

Thanks.